Wow this was an amazing story even if it was rather short. I really think that you should continue this because it has an amazing plot and this story is just plain awesome. Love ya forever and ever. XD

Loved it~ And loved the imagery used. I adore the writing style and all! It really drew me in. Not to mention it was very understandable. <3

i really liked that!^^ although at one point i think you got a bit too carried away with the whole "pure" concept -- disrupted the flow abit..otherwise amazing!:D my personal favourites were "But, instead, the itch turned into a heated rash!" and "It was like that story in Genesis...about Adam and Eve and the snake. Temptation. And, fighting. Oh, but, failing! Just like Eve had! Just like Eve had. She damned humanity just like Roxas damned his undeserving twin." that last line, especially, was absolutely stunning!

ohh, I liked it, it wasn't happy either. I enjoyed the angst.

That was really good.