i like it so far.yukina doesnt seem that ooc.and you made hiei pretty much exactly the kind of brother i expect him to be.

I like that Hiei's mature enough to realize that he has indeed changed. :)

I'm a little weirded out by Tonic, though. But then, I'm not really fond of OCs in YYH fics, especially as romantic interests for any of the main boys.

The thought of Hiei shopping for baby clothes with Kurama made me chuckle a little. I'm actually very surprised to see Hiei caring for a human he just met. Either way this story is starting to get more interesting.

Wow, this chapter was like a smack in the face to me... 0_0

To tell the truth, I really don't know what to say. But please don't take that to mean that I did not enjoy the chapter.

I enjoyed Hiei's P.O.V immensely, you have his character down very well. I could see him thinking and saying every thing you wrot. ^_^ The "Tonic Situation" just took me by surprise is all.

I can't wait to read more though, I'm interested to see how Yukina reacts to this new arrangment that Hiei is going to tell her about. I wonder how she will react. I wonder how Genkai is going to react.

You've left me with so many questions! Lol, I'm frustrated that I can't have any answers right now. ^_^

Please update soon! I'll be waiting anxiously for more!

~WMM

Wait, I'm a little confused. So the woman Hiei was helping before was Tonic? Okay, and so now he's going to live with Yukina and Tonic? I think I understand. A little. Either way I adore your writing skills and this story very much! You're the most talented writer I've had the pleasure of coming in contact with.
I'm not a kiss **. I just speak the truth.

I just finished reading the first three chapters and I have to say that this is a pretty damn good story. The interaction between Hiei and Yukina is well done and you did it without breaking Hiei's character which many authors tend to do.

I will be looking forward to the next chapter if you choose to continue.

Damnit, YOU ARE THE MAN! Well, woman. But still, you rock! I've been wondering when someone would do a decent Yukina/Hiei fic and by god, imgaine my surprise when I saw it was the God of all Godly writers! Yeah I almost passed out. I'm counting on you updating!

i love this story! Update soon!

wow, I love this story!

The dialogue seems to flow so well and I like the twin's interactions. It's refreshing to see Yukina being written from a different...um, angle? I guess you'd call it or another aspect of her personality? or something. And I think you've got Hiei's character down really well. Yeah, he cares about his sister but that doesn't mean he'd act overly sappy to her.

The second person thing threw me off a little at first, but then I got used to it and I think it adds to the story. It's something different anyway.

So again, liking the story XD
and looking forward to another chapter.

I love that the twins' conversations end up going off-tangent. Banter is good. :-)

Can't help but be a bit weirded out by Yukina starting to act like a possessive/jealous girlfriend though.

Yay, another update! I'm so glad that my previous review helped encourage and inspire you. I was hoping that it would, lol.

On to the review: While I did see typos throughout the chapter, there weren't enough to interrupt the flow of the story or distract from the action. As in the previous chapter, as soon as you read through this again, they'll jump out at you. ^_^

I liked the banter between Yukina and Hiei in this chapter. I liked that after their very emotional night together in the last chapter, Yukina sort of grows a backbone when it comes to talking with Hiei. Her spunk and her use of a certain curse word were unique and original, I liked it. ^_^

Also, I like the idea that Hiei does not care for humans much at all while his twin sister is simply fascinated by them. The little conversation you have between the two of them about breast milk and menstrual cycles have to be the first ever in a YYH story and was very interesting to read (almost as if human are a kind of science project Yukina is doing or something).

Also, I really enjoyed Genkai in this chapter as well. She wasn't the usual, tough ol' hag as she is usually portrayed by other writers. In your story, you can tell she really likes Yukina and tries to be polite and kind to her.

All in all, I loved it. ^_^

I can't wait for the next chapter and I think you're doing a splendid job!

~Jessica
(aka WMM)

Beautiful chapter. So touching. I love the image of Hiei and Yukina tangled up together in the futon. Because they certainly need each other.

Greetings! *waves* I got your message and I was so glad to see that you had updated. ^_^ I clicked over here as fast I could and let me tell you, this was an emotional chapter!

I loved how you delved so deeply into Yukina's mind, making her seem quite the opposite of the innocent, I-Love-Everyone type character and made her into something so real.

My absolute favorite line has to be:
"...Because she could have lived for me but she chose to die for you instead.”

That is so awesome of you to put something like that in there. I enjoy so much the fact that you are brave in your ideas of the characters' inner selves. Hiei, I felt, was spot on and I really liked how the entire time she was kind of rambling to him, he sounded as uninterested as he does about everything else.

The only word I can say in critique (and it really is very small, it definitely doesn't detract from the story at all) is that I noticed a few instances of typos in this chapter, but if you go back and read over it yourself they'll be easy to find. ^_^

Anyway, I'm looking forward to another chapter if there will be one and if so, I can't wait to read more. Best of luck in your writing!

~WMM

I love that Yukina knows the truth, and tries her very best to spend time with her brother. :-)

This was an interesting take on the Hiei/Yukina sibling bond. I really liked that you wrote it in 2nd person P.O.V. I've never read a story quite like this done in that perspective. Very original.

I thought you kept both Yukina and Hiei very in-character and I liked the conversation that they shared at the end. I would be interested in knowing whether or not you plan on continuing this.

If you do, I look forward to reading more. If not, I gladly admit that this could stand on its own easily. ^_^ Great job!

~WMM