I nominated this story for the 2012 Paint It Red Awards, in the following category
Gen Best Crime
Reason"Vampires! JanePain! A freaked-out Cho! This one is a great 'team' fic, featuring funny and tenderhearted interactions between Jane and the gang. I love how Baker Street writes them as a group, and this was the first multi-chapter of hers that really showcased that. A cool investigation, some nice h/c, and a surprisingly touching moment between Jane and the mother of a murder victim. Wonderful stuff.
Best wishes!
Very nice story! I had a good time reading it. I especially enjoyed those bits where that police officer, Franks, gets to see Jane in action and is all disbelieving and confused. I have on point of critique, however: several times, when various people were referred to by their title, e.g., "Sr. Agent Lisbon", you shorted the titles. 'Senior' became Sr., for example. While that is the right shortening, I find that when reading fanfics and coming across such shortened titles, in my mind I hear whoever is talking actually saying "Sr" instead of "Senior", which is rather annoying. Ultimately, it gives me in the impression that it was just laziness and an attempt to save the time of typing a few letters. I don't want to come across as harsh or insulting, but I wanted to let you know my impression.
Admittedly, though, this is a very minor point, one that did not keep me from enjoying this story. Just like in your other ones that I've read you did an excellent job capturing Jane, Lisbon, and the other characters. So I'm going to go and read some more of your stories. Cheers!
This was pure joy to read. I've been hooked and couldn't stop. Now it's done I'm at a loss to convey how delightful it was. But I like to think my gratitude and respect will make up for my inarticulateness.
Ah, twilight. LOL, yes that's the first thing I said because I am, o was rather, a huge twilight geek back before the movies made me angry and annoyed at just how much terrible acting and cheap movie making can ruin a book.
Anyway, I believe this is one of my favorites of yours so far. They're all excellent of course but my fascination/obsession with vampires and the entire sub-culture just made this all the more appealing to me.
I really admire the research and planning and work that you must have put into your stories to provide such clear pictures of so many different worlds and facets of human culture. And if course the overall quality of everything that I've read so far as well. Brilliantly written.
I apologize if this is a bit short I'm typing and reading on my iPod at the moment and it's a little tedious to review on.
Again, so in character. Loved the closing dialogue between Cho and Rigsby. And the vampire attack was a surprise. This is a great story-I'm thinking they need a vampire episode on the show. Lisbon undercove hm.
The notation about the Fairmont in Jonathan Redding made me want to look at this story. This chapter alone prompted me to add you to my favorite authors list. Now I can go back and read your stories during the Mentalist fanfic dry spells.
My favorite section of this chapter?"They were in the dance, he knew. Advance, retreat, parry, strike. Neither was pursuing, both waiting for the other to make the first move, defensive and wary but willing, and Kostas shook his head. That was not the Greek way. She would be having his baby by now, if they were Greek.
Brilliantly book worthy!
Also loved the airplane scene and Jane's trick-guess he and Rigsby both got their wishes.
And thank you for spelling "skeptically" correctly. Using 2 c's instead of the "k" is one of the banes of this fandom and a personal pet peeve of mine.
Another good story! If I havent read your "Arsenic and Red Lace" first, this will be my favorite!
How I wish they will make this into a Mentalist episode, cant wait to see Simon Baker dress in "baby blue pajamas, bare footed, hair disheveled...looking like a little boy and all he needed was a teddy bear.
The only thing I dont buy is Patrick Jane went inside the dumpster him self in chapter 6! I think Jane will just bully Lisbon or Franks into doing that like how he bully Lisbon into opening the copper vat in chapter 10!
Gah, creepy ending! o.O And sad, what with Mrs. Minor, but that little scene was awesomely touching. *sigh* Needless to say (though I will anyway) I love it! *.
I was especially intrigued by Cho's reactions, you write him just so amusing in his stoicism. And the way Jane had figured out what had happened to the Minors' girl all that time ago before he even actually met them, in fact, before the case really got underway ... amazing!
You know, I really love your stories, and it may be one of the main factors for that is your not leaving any lose ends. Like hinting at something and then never mentioning it again. Instead, you carefully set something up, often quite subtly, and eventually hark right back to it, be it main plot or side note. You're a truly gifted writer; I can't wait for your next story in a fandom I know. _
Wow... You have a real talent. Have you considered a career as an author? This story was wonderful. Everyone was perfectly in character, and, unlike many Mentalist stories, you actually had a well thought out case for our favorite team to solve.
This was so very awesome! You have everyone down perfectly, and some very decent oc's as well. I think my favorite bit of all was Cho reading Twilight at the end!
Brilliantly written story with well captured characters and good plot twists. Shame about the Twilight reference. Seems I just can't get away from it lately. I would advise against such things next time, it sort of made your idea seem less original. But other than that I loved it.
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