I absolutely love this. Asha never gets the attention she deserves, and I agree that Max's suffering always seems to be put before her. I love how you crafted a life and a past for her to explain her motivations. You are an excellent writer.

Wow, I love this one. I love your Asha. Gorgeous prose.

I am so totally into your Asha/Max slash. Are you still on ffn? Wish you'd write some more . . .

interesting rewrite. Good and dark, like the first. A real wrist-slasher.