Too bad this story probably won't get updated. Now we'll never know what happened! I really like your concept, it's daring and holds real promise of expanding the world of Akira. Very good!

YOU HAVE TO WRITE ANOTHER CHAPTER! its an awesome story ireally like it

Not bad. Please, please continue!

Dear Zap'kay if I call you Zap?),

This story has always facinated me. I read it every chance I get and I always figure out something knew... Weird... Cool, but weird...

Stay safe

Stay healthy

Sincerely,

Starr

Dear Zapenstap,

TBC? NO! Damn. And it was just getting interesting. Really freaky story about 'the other people'. Food for thought. Must go ponder the meanings of life now... Hm.

Stay Safe

Stay Healthy

Yours Sincerely

Starr Bryte

THANK YOU!(Yes, I know it's considered yelling it's merited here.
You, my friend, are a great example of why I read and write fanfiction. And the occasional work like this makes it worth the effort one has to take wading through all the stuff posted here.

The one constructive 'criticism' I'd give: you string together lots of adverb- and adjective-heavy clauses in some of your sentences, which can make your writing a little hard to read [I do the same thing, so I noticed]. Think about breaking things up a bit, otherwise your writing becomes too 'rich' with your great descriptions.

I'm looking forward to your next work
Ciao! Ashoro

Wow I love ur story and to parallel the akira plot is just amazing! It makes it all seem so real and human, a glimpse into the whole city as the main story builds up elsewhere. I also love ur use of similes and ur descriptiveness. U trully are a pro! PLEASE PLAESE PLEASE write more! I'm hooked more on ur story than Taro and his buddies are to those uppers! I love it! It's sheer beauty! _

Okay, this pretty much rocks. Intelligent dialog. Believable and likeable characters. Proper grammer and sentence structure. Basically all the points that make for a solid story are here, and that's rare in FanFiction.

My only words of caution would be against getting too many characters involved. If you spread the various plots too thin, the reader may become detatched from the story, especially as the plot progresses and it takes longer and longer to get back to each character.

Oh, and don't relly on people reviewing your fic's as your main indication as to weather or not to continue on a project. I've only got half a dozen reviews total on my projects, and I'm almost a hundred and twenty pages in. Write what you enjoy, and drop the ones that no longer interest you.

Anyway, I hope this is one that still interests you, because it really is quite good. Keep writing.

Alan Grundhofer

I liked this story very much, I just think there needs to be more chapters to it than just two. So write more chapters.

You read the mangas! Good for you. You should know that having the name akira, or writing the name akira in a public place is illgelal

excellent story. but u need to finish it. who is in the closet? please finish the story. the suspense is killing me! u also need to say more about Tomiko and Naomi.

Wow...I'm so glad you came back here and posted this! Pretty good, a very good sense of atmosphere and some interesting characters. An intriguing ending too please continue, I want to know more! All very vivid and realistic. A few sentences could have done with some polishing, but that's very minor overall, excellent!

And here I am again with a review for chapter 2! Well-written and double-spaced after a sentence, we!*nag nag* So evil of you to stop there! Who's in that closet? I must know! x_x

*gasps* You double-space after your sentences! Yummy!
Er... I mean, I think this fic is coming off to a good start! *grin* Not only is the length nice, it's good to see things from different eyes. Being well-written is a godsend too. XD Congratsness to you!*shuffles off to read the next chapter*

REAALLY GOD!