That was really good, the only things for improving was: you kind of rushed a bit, more detail is needed, and you didn't MAKE A SEQUEL! I think it was pretty good for some of your past ones- you've probably improved a lot by now.

That is sad, and really good, even if it is lacking a bit of detail... still, yes, you should write a sequel. And tell me when you do! Michelle

I liked it!

Interesting idea, but it went by so quickly! You might try expanding the story out a little instead of rushing it. Otherwise,good. :)

ooo...The a/n in the middle was kinda distracting...I especially like how Jake reacted. Twas bery IC.

You call that an end? Otherwise, very nice. What happens next?

! You can't just leave it like that! Finish iiiittttttttt!

A bit rushed at the beginning, but I still liked it a lot. Nice idea...

Lovely. Well, depressing, but lovely. A 7 or 8. A definate 10 if you had developed it more. I really liked the idea, and it doesn't seem anyone has done it before. But a few things were wrong, liked the fact that the social services would take him away quickly. Probably. I dunno, but again, it was really good. Please re-write and go for a sequel!

I love Marco! Please make another one. I loved it soooooo much)

You must have been SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO tempted to do a marco romance! Anyway, I liked it!

::sobs:: Poor Marco. ::sniffle:: Poor, poor Marco. ::sniff:: When's the next? ;)

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