it was god but a bit confusing, its god to make people guess what's going on, but keep them guessing too much and they might loose inrest. becare wen switching pov's aswell, other than that's good job

very well written, but so confusing i still dont understand it. i wish u would continue this story

The only comment I can think of is have one viewpoint and stick to it. And if not, put lines between them to show that it changed. It's hard to follow when something changes from first person to third person in just one space.

Other then that, pretty good.