Omg I LOVE this fanfic so much! I came upon it last night, looking for an Assassin's Creed fanfic that involved Altaïr and an OC; and I have become absorbed by it!

Everything about it, I love!

Your narrative style, the way you describe everything, how you give character to everyone...I love Isra! And I was so sad when Sarai was killed...I was kind of expecting it :( boo

But oh well, I just want to give you kudos for your amazing writing, and your historical knowledge! Are you studying History or something? I'd love to be a historian :D

Well, I've dragged on too much XD

I'll be EAGERLY awaiting more chapters!

I know I won't be let down!

It's been quite a while. Hope to see an update soon!

It's been awhile. Please update soonish?

In the meantime, it's entertaining enough to read the story again from the begining. But still, looking forward to new chapters :)

Just adding my voice to the many: I love this story to bitsies, and it is by far the best AC tale in the history of ever. I look forward to every update!

Best AC fic ever. E-V-E-R. Wonderful OC and wonderful expansion on Altair's character, who, as you have mentioned before, is not all that fleshed out in the games.

Love the plot. Love the characters. Love the writing. Love the style. I apologize for my lack of eloquence, but I am simply speechless after having read this whole thing in the space of a very long day. If I was less exhausted, I would praise your writing with more deserving rhetoric.

Though I do need to add how much I admire your dedication to posting the researcher notes. I, for one, DO read them, and appreciate them immensely.

Waiting for the next update!

YES THERE ARE UPDATES I AM SO HAPPY.

Seriously, very well done story, and it isn't languishing in developer hell either! WOOOOOOO!

An inconsistency is that Isra knows about the Pieces of Eden. I believe that it would be a better plot point for her to not know about Al-Mualim's charm when Altair himself did not know the extent of his power. I would think that Al-Mualim would keep it to himself to A) keep it from falling into other peoples hands and B) to keep his mysticism about him to keep his power consolidated.

At least you offer justification for the very thing I keep seeing as a constant flaw in the author's notes. Yes it is a work of fiction but it is based in true events and should reflect the values of the time. I say again that the Assassin Order is a rather progressive society in a world where women where not afforded much but still I would not say that she should be given this much power over the guild.

Maybe it is just my personal bias against OC's? If she was the head of the spys then maybe, but then that wouldn't be exciting would it?

Fanfiction can allow certain lenience from other types of writing but I just find something wrong with this one. It is well written sure but... I can't place my finger on what I mean right now.

I do not believe in ass-kissing reviews so let me be frank.

I have read up to this point and it has allowed some question to form in my mind over exactly how much allowance that Isra is afforded in this story. Sure that the Assassin order is an extremely progressive minded group, especially so for 1191 in the Islamic countries, but the authority over any other assassin AND being Al-Mualim's star pupil might be pushing what I would call acceptable by canonical standards. Not a GRRL POWUH fic by extremes but seemingly a bit out of sorts for how much power she wields in the overall organization. I'd understand if perhaps she was a high ranking spy as espionage was a role and area that could be filled by men AND women but certainly that management would not spill over into the management of the assassins. Working together for sure but each having it's separate sub-management overseen in total by Al-Mualim.

I do however like how you captured Altair as an arrogant jerk during his beginning missions and how Isra is able to act as his foil in some respects. Altair is also a point of confusion as sometimes it seems his interactions with her sometimes get in the way of the games telling of events. Namely Altair doing most of the intel work himself but this is rather excusable in a sense as he could simply being doing his own work in the intermediate time. The game does have several skips which makes these interactions possible to happen.

I also enjoy the use of the notes in the bottom as it shows that you have taken some time to make sure your terms and mentions of historical events and people are accurate. Shows that you at least do your homework where others might chose to ramble about a topic they know little about.

And yes. You are on a fan fiction recommendation page. That is how I found this in the first place.

Permit me once again to rave about how utterly awesome your story is. Your writing is a gem amongst a sea of sand- so pretty and well-done! I really think the two absolute best parts of this story- no, three, now I think about it- are 1) your stellar characterization 2) your intricate and well-thought-out plot and 3) the word choice you use to make Isra a really sarcastic but deep person. I think I would die if you stopped writing, so don't, please. :)

Still love how you're writing Altair. He's much deeper now than in the game, and it just makes him more awesome. Some people can't pull that off- I've seen him reduced to a smitten fool. The most important part of his character is how seriously he feels about being a good assassin first and foremost. Of course, for all the bad boy swagger, he's got feelings, too, and you've done a good job with that.

Excellent, as always! Update soon- but don't rush it, 'kay?

Calla, your brilliant! XD Absolutely excellent chapter, I laughed and sighed. My favourite bits were definitely the life-wine metaphor and the 'You told her about the pigeons?'. Very typical Altair and just damn lovely writing! :D

I have to say I really love the research notes you leave there. It's always good to learn things, and there's a very strong flavour of the period from your writing. I love the way you use Isra's perspective, certainly.

Also, Miraj? I remember from somewhere...it's related to Isra. A prayer-thing, if I recall. Something to do with Islam. Could he be related to Isra? A brother or something?

-Cymru

One of the main things that I hate about stories is that most of them are cliche and I know the ending before I have even started reading it but I am quite pleased to say that your story is nothing like that. I am constantly wondering what's going to happen next and that's the best thing a story could have in my opinion.

the awesomeness of this story is unreal. i absolutely loved it! i love isra and her personality and i think you've got altair perfectly. i really enjoy reading your research notes as its nice to see someone really putting so much effort into it unlike someone i know *looks down in shame as i get a finger pointed at me* i thought it was hilarious when malik and alty teamed up against her with the wine and the pigeons! so funny...i was so upset when sarai died though! i wasn't expecting it at all! and for marj...or whatever his name is, he's her brother, right?

Another great chapter! I had some good laughs w/ this one ) the first when Isra declares that, unlike wine, life isn't intoxicating and NOT made from grapes ) But my favorite was when Altair asked Malik if Isra knew about the pidgeons LOL I barely read this chapter last night (actually early this morning) and probably couldve woken the whole house if I didn't cover my mouth )

As for my Miraj guess... I'm thinking, maybe, a sibling? The green eyes threw me for a bit b/c I can't for the life of me remember what color eyes Isra has but the fact that Altair wanted to save the flower girl B/C she looked like Isra made me wonder... plus Miraj seemed to recognize her w/o her pendant so he obviously knows her... I'm thinking maybe Isra didn't know the flower girl was related to her b/c she may not have been born yet or was very young when Isra was sold to Al Mualim, which would kind of explain why she didn't push for Altair to save the flower girl... I need to stop now before I keep making assumptions that probably aren't right LOL I just want cookies ( lol

Anyway, can't wait for the next one!