awwww poor sirius his best friend just died and everyone thinks its his fault! good story.

I loved the description of this piece. It was so sad, and I felt bad for Sirius.

Mystii

wow! I loved the description. Hallowed grounds is my favorite description of the story. This was so sad. I felt bad for Sirius.

Sad.

This was nice display of what happened that night. So I'm guessing the challenge was to use those words in a fic? Well you did a great job.

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This is great, I like your take on Sirius and the description was great.

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It's great Rita! I like the way Sirius giving his bike away is covered; in the texts we only get Hagrid's clumsy paraphrasing. Kudos for the symmetry in the both the first and the final paragraph!

Oh, nice use of the words, (love how you slipped opprobrium into the headline). It was angsty, but I would like to mention that Sirius is my favorite, so I am generaly glad the words went to such good usage. Good job!

Lovely short. I really like your work. :)

Well done! Couldn't wait to see how you worked oppobrium into the story.

More angst. You really, really have an aptitude for this stuff. The internal conflict, the pain, it all comes through so well here. Great piece!

Good stuff, you can certainly do angst (as well as other stuff, oh insecure one!)

I like the air of being a slightly detached observer you give Sirius, as if he's already withdrawing from normal life.

it would be nice wouldn't it? grins, i liked and hated this one. it stupid reason for hating it, it'd because you had'!' in there. i hate them in stories, silly i use them all the time in reviews but...i just argh i can't even put it in words, lets put it in the strange nairie dislikes box along with tranulas. i think i am in a mood, ignore me.

bits i loved were this line 'It was now considered hallowed grounds; the place where James and Lily met their deaths at the hands of he-who-must-not-be-named. As it lay in a pile of rubble that night, he stood there from the shadows, praying that what he was looking at was only a hellish nightmare.' what an opener, :) loved it loved it! well now you are completely confused as i so offend am, i'll bid you a farewell until next update ;P

Wow! Great use of the words, and you write angst so well.

I liked how you wrote the exposition, as if it was all running through Sirius' head. Gave it a bit of a poetic feel

One question: Did you mean "the" or "they" in the title. I just wanted to make sure; it looked like a typo.

Great work here! Good job with the words and a good choice with how to use them. You should write more angsty pieces. This was really well done.