I like this one! D's thoughts and the "his hands scoop" and the fact that she, of her own volition, straddles him.

Good job.

Gigglesnort... so funny.

For cereal? You think that this was RETARDED? I evidently I need to get my definitions straight. I don't think your realize that half of your stories are the inspiration for MY stories and the other half is the reason I am unable to focus on Calculus. As I am a total teetotaler, I am appalled I'm saying this, but... If this is the kind of writing you produce from being completely smashed, maybe you should get drunk more often. When, you know, it won't effect your school work or other wise... Zen-Derek is a win. I can almost see a fan art (if people actually did fan art..) ^^

I like the words you used and how you put them with other work that work so well, and being in Derek's head was so cool.

I read this on the recommendation of Jo, and BOY WAS SHE RIGHT. SO GOOD! This is a fantastic oneshot. I love how completely in Derek's head you were, and the whole "enemies, treason, country" metaphor was absolutely brilliant. If this is what YOU think is dreck, I can only imagine what your other fics entail. I don't think it can get better than this! I will have to read more of your work! :)

I never buy the Derek-gives-Casey-a-massage bit- but you did it wonderfully. (I find myself thinking that maybe it's because it just opens and it's already happening- maybe not though)
This was really funny, and I love the analogies- they were perfect.

"Edwin in a speedo. (Woah, woah. Too unsexy.) Starting again"

Lol I actually did laugh out load at his point- that's hilarious!

Loved the ending too:D

So...

I kind of wish I was Derek in this circumstance.

Because it would be awesome.

Good job.

I think it's official: you're my favorite LWD author.
I'm absolutely engrossed by the way you write Derek. It brings fantastic new levels of perspective to the ship.
Awesome job.

So I hate parentheses. And, somehow, you make them work. Most of the time. Sometime they're a little awkwardly placed. But about %90 of the time, they work.

Which is just weird, you've broken the laws of what I like in fanfiction. Congradulations.

But no, this was hot, and hilarious. And I have never seen a massage taking a wrong turn with the infamous hair-in-the-zipper tactic in a Dasey fanfic. And look at you, you've got me writing a serious review for the first time in forever. Usually I just point out funny quotes.

I loved him referring to Casey as the enemy. Great job. Keep writing.

~Jo

Gods, that stoy was truly mind-blowingly amazing. I really loved it. Great plot, great prose, hilarious metaphor. Favoriting!

animeHrmIne
=^;^=

"Casey,” he says (and since when the hell is he twelve again? he would like advance warning the next time his voice decides to try out that sort of experimental acrobat…ography)"

Great description.

Crikey, this was hot, in character, and enjoyable on multiple levels. Great job.

Haha! I'm laughing and it's kind of hard to type at the same time
This is hysterical.
I love your usage of the "enemy" analogue and how Derek is Zen-Derek. Abso-positive-lutely Not Affected By His Extremely Hot Stepsiter Who Is Between His Legs And Is BREATHING (it should be illegal)
I think I like died laughing a few times.
=]

Oh, not retarded at all! It was absolutely hilarious and I had to read it with my hand stuffed in my mind so as to not wake my roomate. I thought your descriptions were some of the funniest I've read and kind of sexy at the same time. And Derek was very, very in-character. Thank you for this!

This is...wow...you just left me speechless. And I just read WLS's new story so I needed something to make me stop crying and THIS was IT.
I freakin' adored it. Your descriptions were all wonderful and just so *hilarious*. It's almost as if Derek Venturi's mind is your private property to play in (and hey that sounds a little dirty, no, after all his mind must be deep, deep in the gutter.) The whole massage scene is ultra-hot but then the part where she's in a wet-dream position (no he's never had the fantasy, not at all) is a real scorcher. And then she's *breathing* on him and doesn't she realize what THAT does? I've always thought of Casey as a romance-novely-type so she *should* know, maybe it's deliberate. After all he teases her so much, he really needs some payback.
The kiss was again so very hot, you've a gift for them I suppose! And if Casey hadn't paid him back, I'd have hunted him in fantasy-land and returned the favour myself! Great job!

Hehe. This was very bad- in the very best sense of the word.
:D
I enjoyed it very much: your writing style always cracks me up. And yes, the metaphor was beaten to death, and probably has numerous post-mortem wounds, too-- but, well, it deserved them.
In essence: hi-larious. Great job.