Wow this was so sad and there was so much romance in it, it's such an amazing read-I really enjoyed it.

What a wonderful story. I truly enjoyed reading it, even if it did make me cry at the end. ^-^

I, myself, just finished reading "Memoirs of a Geisha," and was inspired by one of the many similes to write an IY fic. I clicked on this because it looked slightly interesting, and because I really enjoyed the book.

This was beautifully written, and the love Kagome held for Sesshoumaru, and vice versa, was written so clearly, so gorgeously, that I didn't mind the sex at all. However, the whole fic was very hard for me to finish, because in the beginning, it was so painfully similar to "Memoirs" that I nearly exited the window. I dislike fanfictions that read like they are trying to be original but adhere, like skin-tight denim to sweaty flesh, to the plotline of the book, series, etc. they are based off of. I realize that, yes, you wanted to write a fic that was based off of "Memoirs," but it was a bit much to give Kagome blue eyes just like Sayuri, write Kikyou off like a Hatsumomo twin, and even have the titles be almost the same.

The only reason that I stuck to this was because I felt the need to give you an adequate review, and that would have been difficult to do if I had only read the first page or so. I am actually very glad I did, because after the war it truly did turn into a story of its own. I really grew to like the writing style you used throughout the fic, and only when it got to the S/K love scenes did I realize. Everything was depicted very elegantly and descriptively. Although you were probably just trying to mimic the sense of the writing of Arthur Golden (unless you have only seen the movie, that is, and not read the book), it was very enjoyable. Occasionally I ran into a sentence or two that did not read very smoothly, what with a couple of unnecessary words, or words that were too long, tripping over each other, and there were little typos and grammar mistakes littered all over the place. If you edit this piece, it could really be a treasure.

Something else that really, really bothered me was the way you switched from first person to third person at the end. I recognize the difficulty of not being able to build a whole picture with only a single voice very easily, but it reads much more smoothly if you keep everything in one POV. Again, if you tweak it a bit in some places (and a LOT more in other places), I would probably feel very inclined to favorite this.

Loved the regal flavor of the narration. Loved the fabulous depiction of the romance. Didn't like the bitter Kikyou or the title so much, or the blue eyes. The POV-switching was wonky. Other than that, it was excellent, if a bit long-winded. I am currently contemplating putting you in my author alerts.

Please take a look at my own "Memoirs"-inspired fic, "Unrequited Dancers." Please feel free to comment as frankly as you see necessary.

Ta ta,
Yellow

It's very good, all the characters fit their roles beautifully. Good job!

aww how sweet an sad great story i really enjoyed it but i have never seen the movie you have based this off of. is it any good if so i might have to watch it soon?

it was so sad. i want more! this was a wonderful story, i hope to read more seeshomaru Kagome parrings form you.. or maybe even Naraku to. :D
Good luck.

wow, this story was not bad at all!
i really liked it, but wished that you would put more of Sesshoumaru's thoughts. more of his coldness. HAHA.
sadist, i am.
(:

I recently watched 'Memoirs of a Geisha' and i think you did an excellent job of capturing the feel of the movie. i also think that you got in all of the most important aspects of the movie. i hope you continue writing, 'cause you're damn good at it.

Hey, I really liked this! I think you definitely fulfilled your goal of writing a descriptive story. You had some pretty nice imagery going on there. Yes, there were some POV and grammar issues, but very solid overall. My biggest critique, I guess, would be that even though this is supposed to be based on Memoirs of a Geisha, it was almost too based on it. Your version was written beautifully, but the fact that it follows the original so closely kind of detracts from the originality and creativeness of it. If you decide to write something else based on another story, I would suggest writing a more loosely based adaptation. You could also work on your characterization a little bit more. Kagome's characterization was good, especially since it was written from her POV, but even going into the minor characters like Kaede and Miroku a little bit more would have been good. I thought there was also a little bit of a plot hole. You never really explained why Sesshomaru was so enamored with Kagome despite being known as a "human-hater." Maybe you could include it in that part near the end while he's reading her memoir? I think elaborating on that would make the plot seem a little more plausible. Anyway, good job!! Hope you don't mind the long review. This is definitely going on my fave list =)

PS: You changed Miroku's surname from 'Nubo' to 'Nobu' halfway through.

Loved it just like all of your other work that I read! It was very detailed and put you right there! Keep up the great work!

This pair was truly the best to re-enact this touching love story. I loved it.

Oh I did! I did tear up--in fact I'm on the verge of balling like a baby, as embarassing as it is to admit that...

[/sniffs]

But I can't HELP it!! The story is so beautifully written, so technically its your fault. Don't worry I forgive you. :]

I understand how you're having trouble with 1st POV. It's one of my many weaknesses (along with finishing...) However, your attempt was fantastic! I had the feeling I was really reading an actual person's words, as intended for the one they were destined for, and it made my heart ache in a good way. So kudos to YOU for your acheivement! Also, I didn't find your use of the japanese random at all, it was somewhat natural I think...and helpful too, to those of us who aren't all that familiar with said language. Thank you.

No lies, and I'm not trying to earn brownie points.

Whoa. This turned into more of a PM, than a review. Apologies.

Best of Luck with all other practice at 1st POV--
Siyanna

this was a really good story, I cried at the end and I enjoyed Reading it

I loved it dear...As I have loved every story of yours I have read. And now I have an account, so I can reveiw. There were a few grammer errors, but as you DID send it to a beta, it is not your fault, and I forgive you lol

I think this is great! You did an awesome job.
The only thing I notice is that some words are used wrong.
But that could tie into the whole POV thing.
I hope that helped. But still great work, keep
it up.