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frankcarlo mills
2009-11-14 . chapter 2
are you going to use Sonic, Knuckles, Amy, and other such Sonic characters as well? Just asking
Alex Warlorn
2009-07-19 . chapter 4
Uh... didn't you tell me you were NOT gonna include any characters from MMZ? What's with the ghosts from the future anyway? How did they get involved in this?

Axel sure seems to have a sublime stream of bad luck.

What's the story behind Marino anyway? I know she was introduced in Megaman Command Mission, and was out to steal the new tech on the island: but who built her? And what was her role in the story?

from the twentieth century,” she muttered.

I'm not sure that's when the novels were written...

Deep breaths that filled her lungs,

She doesn't have lungs anymore.

If Marino openly admits to being a criminal, then why hasn't she been shut down or reprogrammed?

If Cream is fully and utterly herself, with no alterations to her mind and is in full control of the reploid body, then why did she blurb out like she was being turned on for the first time for a new owner?

Nice trick with Cinnamon being the one to talk to Cream. Reminds me of when Tai chatted with heartmon in your other fic.

“Cream... my name’s Cream the Rabbit.”

If Cream's body was made for her, then why would it come with an alternate name? Her body saying her alt name like that felt just plain weird and I think you could have used another method for it to be figured out.

“Axl, just shut up and get your ** back here!” replied the annoyed voice of Layer.

GEEZE! No need to be curt!

UGH! Don't tell me Cream's future self after he body was destroyed continued to exist as a cyber-elf and decided to screw with time and space and go back in time to alter the timeline. Ugh!

Cream is in for a nervous break down when reality kicks in, (that her mother has likely died of old age by now, she'll never see Cream again, etc).
DrTempo
2009-06-01 . chapter 3
Good fic so far. I too, wonder more about Cream's new body...like how curvy is it? Hehehehe...
Alex Warlorn
2009-06-01 . chapter 3
Sigma wants to exterminate the human race and have himself be dictator for eternity of the planet and beyond.

Metal Sonic has a psychotic fixation on proving he's better than Sonic and turning his original into dust.

And if he thinks Sonic is dead, I think he'd be stuck doing some soul searching. And it's kinda weird metal would activate/arrive at the same time one of the emeralds was found and placed into a functional body.

Question: Is tails soul still IN the emerald? If so all someone needs to do is pluck the gem out of his 'body' for him to be helpless. It also means he can build himself another vessel similar to his original more in appearance. That's assuming of course Tails' soul has permanently bonded with that of the chaos emerald and can't be separated. Of course that would mean that for all intents and purposes tails WAS the chaos emerald.


But to think that they were actual robots…

I wonder if to call a reploid a robot is to call a human being an animal by comparison.

When in the MMX series does this take place?

Since it apparently takes place before Zero ditched his original body to be ride of the Maverick virus and Dr. Weil turned it into Omega (what a freak out that would be for Tails with the similar names).

And Zero was also the name of one of Robotnik's robots don't forget.

Heh, maybe this whole thing gives Zero the idea to lose his old body believing he had separate the part of his programming that's firmware and only upload his software thinking he can separate himself from the virus that way.

It also most likely takes place before X's four 'clone children' were born (the Four Guardians). The weird thing is that the source material suggests that they fought ALONG SIDE the heroes against Weil during the Elf Wars... but they acted as if they were meeting Zero for the first time when they met in MMZ1.

I know it was declared by the creators to be incorrect, but I've wonder what difference it makes to the series by NOT having the Mother Elf be Iris' programming resurrected, since having it be so adds some poetry to things.

“Dang, and you looked so cute together… why did you break up?”

Good question.

“He’s still thinking about Iris, dummy!”

She's DEAD you idiot! Has been for decades! Get over it you stupid emo idiot! Try letting GO for once in your life! You really think she'd LIKE seeing you like this? Wallowing in it after all this time?!

And must be insulting to Layer! I mean seriously! She's playing second fiddle to a dead woman!

Anyways, the two of us realized that this relationship was not working, so we stopped going out.”

If Layer actually CARED about him. She'd have helped him MOVE ON!

Instead they just decide to drop it and walk away from each other? I think would never have pegged Zero for a coward!

WHY is Marino with the mavrick hunters? She's a criminal and a thief.

Huh? Okay. Tails ending up in a reploid body that happens to be similar to his old species I can accept as fate.

But how did Cream's emerald also end up in a reploid body that happened to be akin to her original species? Now all reploids are animaloid after all. And not every place is gonna have spare shut down bodies laying about, and not everyone who sees a glowing rock is gonna feel the urge to put it into a de-activated robot.

Not all the chaos emeralds are gonna land somewhere were deactivated reploids are laying about, nor would they be all animaloid types, nor will they by chance be put into a shell that's their original species, and not everyone is gonna think to put a power gem into a deactivated empty 'soulless' reploid shell.

You could also use some more details on what Cream's new form looks like.

If she's in a combat model that's gonna scare her. Realizing she needs to fight is one thing but to BE a weapon, in particular for a child, is not gonna be pleasant.

The best Cheese could be IMHO is a prototype cyber-elf (perhaps ultimately even fusing with Cream).

But Chao are supposed to be near immortal anyway, when they die they go right back into the egg until they hatch again.
Novagirl97
2009-05-22 . chapter 2
Whoa! Your story is awesome! Seriously! It's amazing. With a combonation of Megaman X and Sonic the hedgehog, does make an interesting story! Thanks and good job! Please, UPDATE SOON!
Solarice04
2009-05-21 . chapter 2
Hm... Very interesting.

Assuming that Shadow, Knuckles, and Cream are in the same situation as Tails, that still leaves three emeralds with souls in them unaccounted for. I wonder who would be in the the remaining ones. Unless, of course, Sonic is also in an emerald.

Anyway, excellent chapter. I can't wait for the next one.
Alex Warlorn
2009-05-21 . chapter 2
Omega's change of heart shows no foreshadowing and his last request also doesn't make sense with Omega's character.

This is like if Sonic with no foreshadowing decided act more like Shadow.

the fury in his eyes, the bristled fur on his tails, the shaking fists…

** off in battle only turns you into a kamakazi.

“You traitor!” Eggman yelled

E-100 ZERO is the only one of his bots above the grunt level whose ever stayed loyal to him it seems. Poor doctor.

“I will probably never get used to being a robot,” Tails sighed.

In particular due to the sheer prejudice against sentient machines mobians have thanks to Eggman.

Seven Emeralds:
Amy. Cream. Knuckles. Shadow. Sonic. Tails. Rouge.

Would be interesting if Shadow's emeralds was never found and only found centuries later by Neo Arcadia by the surviving Four Guardians after Copy-X was destroyed. The possible future of King Shadow showed that if given the power and the opportunity, Shadow wouldn't be oppose to Neo Arcadia's ruthless policies (in particular with the black and white thinking, immature, self-deluded Copy-X gone and Megaman X's three surviving 'specialized' clones running things in, ironically, much more the spirit of how the original X would have ruled than their master did).

P: Can we get back to my Never Ending Game soon?

One thing for Tails to realize is that while his soul is still his own, he now has a repliod's BRAIN, and that means he has the bad copy of the suffering circuit.

One of the irony in the final part of MMZ3 was that while Omega was indeed just inhabiting Zero's original body, his personality was much closer to Zero's original true persona. While Zero still had the heart of a hero that Sigma left him when Zero infected him with the original virus turning him evil.

Roxas, Zero, and Soma Cruz as all interesting in that when you play them, they've all been effectively, 'personality and/or memory wiped' so the person you play as and get to know isn't really who this person original was before being tampered with.

Dracula was blindly driven by loss and genocidal and his inability to -accept- loss without even a hint of maturity (how he could have turned when Soma thought he saw Mina's death suggests he still lacks the maturity to deal with loss). Roxas was callous and bitter from what we saw of the scenes of KHs2 and akin in manner to his fellow organization 13 members (he didn't leaves from any sense of conscience, he just couldn't get what he wanted from them), and Zero was a pure-blooded psychopath serial killer.
Anonamas
2009-05-15 . chapter 1
WHAT THE HECK!?! TAILS IS A REPLOID!?! Very... odd. Update soon!
Ano19735
2009-05-12 . chapter 1
that's a good start. keep up the good work, and you'll be sure to have me at a reader. I want to know what happend next, after all ;).
Solarice04
2009-05-08 . chapter 1
Awesome story! I can't wait to see it continued!

Incidentally, where did you get the idea of putting Tails' soul in an emerald?
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