I'm completely confused now... What happened to your fic? Tentacles took Matrix, and now, he's there , like nothing happened! Try to change it!

You got a great deal of flames for this story, and I don't really see why. I never came across it the first two times you attempted to write it, but, after reading the first chapter, I think it is prefectly fine. The only thing that I would advise(Mind you, I've not yet read on, so I don't know if it occurs or not)is that you provide a description of the new characters introduced(Cat, Terrin, Illan). I'll keep with it and continue to review!

Bye!

Kate

DG, I tried bro, I did. I so tried to get the gist of this and it didn't work. Once again I was lost withing chapter one and the confusion continued through chapter 2. Look, I remember you emailed me last time (which, yes I got, but school and crap) It's summer now, so I CAN help if you want it.

I tried understanding it. Really I did. There were parts that I enjoyed, but then I'd get lost again. I'm a bit confused as to the names...by "Vixen", Bob's old partner, did you mean "Dixon Green"? And I assume "Wellman" is "Welman". I've never heard of "Malestorm", and I'm just wondering if it's supposed to be the word "Maelstrom".

On the plus side, you have a grasp of spelling and grammar. I think that trying to introduce a whole new crowd of characters as fast as you did will make your reader confused, though. It looks as though there could be something great buried amidst all the confusion.

Okay, I've been rewriting the early parts of the story, and I've also got later chapters. Unfortunatly, I've also hit a road block with the new method of uploading, so it's going to take even longer to get this thing done. But I'm working on it!

DUDE! Are you not reading your reviews? People are trying to HELP you here! This a good story gone bad! FIX IT! For the love of Peter, please fix this story! Who the hell are all these people you've added? This couldn've been a great story dude. PLEASE! I implore you to fix it! Right now! I even left my email address! I will fix it for you! I don't mind! Really! Please just fix this story. Reading it gives me a confused as hell headache. Stop driving in confusion city. Come and join the rest of us Explanationville.

Hi there, this has an interesting plot but I'm afraid I have to agree with Gina here that all the time jumps are more than a little confusing. It's hard to fathom out what's happening at what time. You do have an interesting idea for a plot line but the jumps all the time are very offputting.

Congratulations! Your story makes absolutely no sense. Excellent use of idiotic new characters nobody cares about, btw. I look forward to reading "The Tentacle Capture II".

Ouch. Well, I think that review was uncalled for, but man, you're just driving through confused city here. When I read chapter 2, I thought "Yes! he's taken the advice and is going to go into things" then I got to chapter 3 and got all confused again. I would certainly never say "never write again" but you really need to clean your stuff up. If you need an example, chaeck out Debbie Kluge series in the Real Adventures of Jonny Quest. Her latest story goes back and forth between different scenes and it's totally good. Take a point from that, huh and come back with this story.

It's interesting, though. The plot is pretty good. Not make the writing as good.

Gina

Man, this sucks all over the place. Advice: never try to write again.

Um...interesting, I guess, but I am so confused. I mean, it's obvious you're jumping to different parts of the past and present, but they're together in one big lump and it makes it confusing as to where you're going with this. I anything start out with one thing and get more into it. Who's Terrin? I don't remember him, so I assume he's a character you thought up.

Clear some things up for the readers, okay?