Nice. A well written and paced story. Simple, short and yet intriguing.

Good first chapter!

Nice beginning! There are not a lot of stories that use that little sentence Hoggle said to Sarah about not leaving the center and as i recall, they were all good stories! ( hehe, enough pression on you now? XD Just kidding) It sounds promising! Hope you'll update soon!

An interesting story, and I look forward in seeing where you take it!

Very nice. I love all your stories. Apparently you caught the Labyrinth bug. I'm glad. If only more would get it with your quality of writing. Please continue.

OH HOT DAMN THIS IS MY FAN FICTION! - A

Sorry, N is away.

A without N

Oh...er.. urg... more? I like your characterizations so far. I want to know what J means by those cryptic statements.

creepy! :)

Very interesting reading today. Keep smiling. :-)

Hey that was good I can't wait to see what happens next I really can't wait till you post. I want a lemon.Please soon.

hugs and puppies

It's interesting! I'll follow this story toknow what will come next!:D

omg...this story already sounds so good...please write more..u could really go somewhere w/it...update asap