I love the bitter-sweet end.

Meh. The sex part was a little weird but the rest of the story... 3

I got a little confused when Heimdall found Loki in the field- and the order of things, like, time and story wise (compatibility with the anime/manga anyway) it was a little off. And you should probably look into a beta...

But I loved the concept, and I loved how you wrote Heimdall's character- cause he is a little psycho path who's completely obsessed with Loki even though not a lot of people tend to see that. D: And I absolutely ADORE Asgard set stories, the fact that this just happened to be a Heimdaloki for the first time in like... FOREVER... just made everything a hell of a lot better, cause I missed it like crazy xD

So yeah- this is long, and you made my day. -gives you cookie- -

I cried. This was so sweet and passionate that, half the time, I was screaming at the computer screen. That you for this wonderful fanfic...and I hope to see more in the future.

Much obliged, yeah, he would say that. (Wink)

Oh my gosh! Yay! LokixHeimdall for once! This fic made me very happy. :D

well it was nicely done, even the parts where you weren't comfortable writing. but those parts are exactly what needs a bit of improvement. i can't believe i'm writing this but, dude, you kinda skipped the whole foreplay. i mean, even gods don't just jump in like that. there has to be a bit of stimulation on both sides. coz loki can't just do that to heimdall without the guy doing something physical to arouse him as well, and i don't think kissing back would cut it. and what's up with loki breaking down suddenly? that scene just jumped right out at me. i mean, after they consummate their bond, he suffers an emotional breakdown because he discovers he'll be the end of the world? the scene could have gone differently.

overall it was done very well though. congratz. _

It was awesome! It was really professional and you've really improved. I really like the way you made out Heimdall to be. He's kind of obsessed but he still stays kind of in character. And the way you made out Loki to be sort of carefree guy at the field is nice love it!