wow, this story was absolutely fantastic. i loved the way i could visualize every scene. perfect 5th season finale, this should have been the real one!

i absolutely love the way you did this while keeping them all in character. the way you made it captivating even though cameron & thirteen already had a history.. cause sometimes that can make it dull and contrived.
very good. i liked it alot. :)

That's exactly what I wish had happened... you write beautifully.

Awesome job! Very in character and really beautiful. Loved it :)

that was a really great, too bad it was only one chapter

absolutely brilliant! so beautiful! if only... :)

definitely agree that this would have been a better ending ;)

wow.i wish it would have ended like tht..
greaat story :D

nice job!
i loved this story and your right, this is what should have happened.

i really liked the part where the bartender took thirteen's keys before she'd even started to drink, that was hilarious!


awesome story

Awe...I like your version much better!

Well I havent actually seen the Season finale but I was hoping that when I do, it would turn out that you actually hadnt changed that much at all. I guess that's not the case and Thirteen doesnt actually come into it at all?
Anyways your version was fab and I loved it!!

I liked the physical details-specifically where Remy is looking up at Cameron with adoration, very sweet and implies a lot of emotions.
I feel like you put more details in this overall and it came out well. They seem comfortable with one another and you understand the characters well. The parallels between 13 and House were good and I think they are honest with one another. More later.

=')
I so wish you were one of the writers of House tbh lol. This ending is way better than the one in the ep (:
Really awsome job
<3