i love this story so much! will you be continuing this story?

I am sorry I missed this till now- the story must have been updated at a pretty busy time. In any case this was another really good chapter, and a nice place to finish this story on. The entire story was written well and all the tent scenes did create a feeling of tension and a bit of claustraphobia which were very effective in their use here.

I also liked how you ended the story with some tention, leaving the reader unsure if Naomi was fulling backing off again. In all this was a very enjoyable read and I hope to see more from you in the future.

Yay for Effy! See, parties go so much better when no-one's hit in the head with a rock, that's all I'm saying.

PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE UPDATE.
ONE OF THE BEST FANFICS OF NAOMI AND EMILY!

You're so good at writing - you capture the characters perfectly..! It has such a good reading pace, please continue it..! :D
Also, Emily's last name is Fitch not Finch ;) Don't worry.. it happens :P
PLEASE DO MORE..! :)

Really like this. cant wait for more chapters!

was looking for a fic that was about the unseen moments JJ commented on. Awesome bdw. Didn't think of Naomi as a tease:p

lovely fic..can't wait for the next! :D

Yummy! the next chapter should be even hotter!

OH my gidy gidy gidy ... Aunt ! This is Fantastic ! I think i'll never sleep with someone in a sleeping bag anymore ! It's so frustrating ! You are good in that, i mean frustrated people with your words !
Plz update soon , you are killing me !

Woohoo this is well good!

hope you update soon man i want to see the rest of where you left off lol

continue! :D

I normally feel so-so about these in depth analyses of certain scenes as often they don't add anything or become hot and heavy a little too quickly. But yeah I really enjoyed these two chapters, especially the second. You captured the true indecisive nature of their relationship at this point which makes it so interesting. I would be interested in seeing this continue, though I wonder how much more time you have to play with before this truly becomes AU.

One tiny note which will seem very pedantic, but Katie couldn't have come to their tent, as Naomi and Emily hadn't already gone before Katie ran through the woods and had her encounter with Effie, as far as I am aware. With the relevations about Freddie and Effie as well I doubt she was in the quiet and controlled mood that she is shown in here either. As I say it is a small point that I happened to notice.

i love love love this story... spot on characterisation! more please! x

OI ! God ! That was brilliant ! The way you capture each characters, each personality and each moments is just perfect ! I love your story, the way you write is erm fantastic !
And right now i'm totally frustrated ! OH GOD ! I can't stand it !!
Please update soon !

Nice start, I enjoyed both chapters. JJ's hilarious when he's irritating the hell out of others whilst not having a clue he's doing it!

Liked the line about Naomi 'not being angry Emily slept with JJ but being angry with herself for being so jealous on finding out'.

Keep writing. By the way, Emily's surname is Fitch, not Finch!