This story is quite stupid. You're so retarded. You review other storys as Anonymous and say "Halo7648718blah's Story is better." Your story is the stupidest thing I've ever read on the planet earth.

Quit ruining the LBP archive with horrible stories like this.

Moron.

So, the3starr, I'm going to look up your LBP account now. I'll see what you've done on the game.

This is in script format, with no prose, and it's nit labeled who's talking.

"LET'S SEE YOU DO BETTER"

My review is comprehensible, right?

"YOU'RE JUST JEALOUS"

...That's concieted

"DUN LIKE DUNREAD"

Reviews are done to advise others about works, such as this. If it's good, we review it with praise and adoration. If it's bad, we don't.

I have now conquered the 3 generic excuses for bad writing

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Wait, this was just dialog! There wasn't any narration or description. What was the boss?

Uhm, wait...

You know, sackboy reappears in his pod when you run out of respawns. So, how did he die?

help me im drowning a sea of my own tears from the sadness i got after reading this story...

Dude, everybody knows the unregistered users saying your stories are better are all you. That would be okay, but PLEASE fix your grammar and spelling! You're insulting other's writing, but your stories themselves aren't half as good! It's not fair to anybody.

GOOD JOB!

SO! MANY! TYPOS! ARGH!

Please, please fix your spelling. PLEASE? It is a chaotic story as well, I can only see dialouge. PLEASE update this story for spelling and chaos. Also, the ending made me want to kill myself for playing littleBIGplanet. Other than that, it's a good story.

its good that you decided to make a sackboy story, you are one of the very very few. I would make one if I could think of anything...

no its not i've worked very hard thinking and trying to be a good story writter and i did good its true and i did good...so no offense but my story does kinda not make sense because im halo7458963's brother and i was the one who made this story!

this story is sad it's a bunch of continuous talk and it doesn't make one obviously wants to be your friend on ps3 your not even writing because you enjoy this your just using this to get friends on ps3 this is super sad. 1 out of 1oo

this is a very great awsome chapter i want more!

i am already ur friend on PS3 can you guess who i am if you dont belive me we did a video together

AWSOME STORY SO FAR MAKE MORE MAKE MORE

i like LBP but after i read this i stopped playing