... I LOVE YOU FOR MAKING THIS *bows down to you epic epicness* Im sorry,just when i read the series in fifth grade, i really, and i mean REALLY wanted luke and jen to kiss, it heartbroken me when jen died, so you are epic for writing this! VIVA LA LUKE/JEN! *starts singing viva la vida*

i loved it! After i read the whole series i wanted jen to come back and fall in love with luke so bad! I was excited to read this story because i knew that my wish would be fufilled!

This story is so sweet!I hated it when Jen died!

I thought that was really cute! You should write more!

Wow. Good story. Needs work though. Write more!

-Pokemon 17-

Don't end it here! I want to know what happens! This sounds very cute.

The only qualm I have with this is that the romance seems sort of in-your-face, you know? I think making it a little more subtle might help. I'd even say make the story a little less brief, because that way you can build up to the kiss instead of just dropping it on us.

Also, it seemed just a little bit choppy--like the sentence fluency wasn't quite right. But it wasn't *bad*, so I wouldn't worry about that too much.

You gotta love those ten-minute stories. :)

Ashe