I was soooo glad to see a familiar author still updating after my long absence! Especially one as talented as you :-)
This is the best story I've read in a while. Your depiction of the dynamic between Bulma and Vegeta is perfect, so much so that I regularly found myself re-reading! I like my Vegeta dark, and you certainly obliged.
I'll be eagerly awaiting your next installment, and I hope to see new works from you in the future!
I was soooo glad to see a familiar author still updating after my long absence! Especially one as talented as you :-)
This is the best story I've read in a while. Your depiction of the dynamic between Bulma and Vegeta is perfect, so much so that I regularly found myself re-reading! I like my Vegeta dark, and you certainly obliged.
I'll be eagerly awaiting your next installment, and I hope to see new works from you in the future!
This was amazing! You managed to keep me in suspense throughout the whole chapter. I felt like I was watching a movie! I absolutely love your writing style.
Now on to the story, lol. Raditz has Gohan! I wonder if Gohan will develop into a cold hard killer. I have so many questions and can't wait to keep reading. I love the chapter length too. Short sweet and to the point. I can't read extremely long chapters because of my squirrel like attention span, lol.
After reading this twice (firstly last night when I was in an excited but sleepy haze because it was past my bedtime, and secondly this morning on my phone) I've finally got some time to write you a decent review...
LOVED IT!
You already know I love Puar and Raditz together, and it was wonderful to see more character development. I adore the way you add little details, like Raditz' shadows dancing in the light of the TV, or his hair pooling on the floor, and I really like the fact that Puar was able to do a bit of damage to Puar.
In terms of their relationship and Saiyan possessiveness, I don't think it's dangerous/getting into abusive territory. And even if it was, I would prefer to read a story that reflected Saiyan nature in all of its viciousness rather than a story that shied away from the fact that Saiyans are inherently violent in nature. After all, they are aliens, and therefore what Earthling may deem right/wrong may be understood in a comepletely different way by Saiyans.
Which brings me to the second thing I wanted to mention, it is hilarious (and makes perfect sense) that Raditz doesn't/didn't? (I'm not too convinced he gets it yet) understand human behaviour when it comes to cats. The fact that he saw Bulma petting Puar as "innocent wank material" is a crack up.
I also love Puar's kitty behaviour when he kneads the pillow haha, it's very cute.
In terms of Frieza, I have to admit that I was feeling a little sorry for him in the beginning regarding his brother and father, but after that scene in the bath... *shudders*. BUT I do like that you're adding this character development, and the fact that he's missing Zarbon is definitely an important thing to add in. I just can't sympathise with him because he's waaay too creepy, but I enjoy reading it all the same.
I hope you're doing okay, and I wouldn't feel bad at all about the posting time. In my opinion writing is a gift to readers, and not something that readers have a right to demand. If it takes time, then it takes time :)
Your story is awesome; but you know this LOL. I was waiting for the new chapter so impatient.
I love Raditz and Puar is my favorite couple after VXB. The part where raditz say that he has fantasies with puar cat is hilariously, is me or all sayas are so jealous.
I hope the next chapter will not delay as much as this.
yay for Tien breaking out of shell! I was giggling the whole time reading about Radditz getting all hot and bothered when Bulma pets Puar, lol. good update )
Loved this chapter, it was definitely worth the wait! It was awesome to see some real character development happening, with Tien, Frieza and also with Raditz and Puar. And I'm pretty stoked for meeting Tarble in the next one too! Good job!
A lovely update with a nice insight into Tien's character at the beginning. I'm glad Chiaotzu was able to take out as many men as he did with his sacrifice even if it was ultimately futile. How his fighting mettle is treated in the series is a little depressing, and I'm glad you've stuck with your pattern of beefing up the lesser characters a bit.
I know that since you've initiated the pattern of possessiveness as a Saiyan biological(?) trait, you've got to follow through and apply it to the other Saiyan relationships, but it still makes me a little uncomfortable-not the way you write it, just the idea in general. I do hope that this situation gets resolved completely; otherwise, I feel that both Bulma and Puar should get the hell outta dodge with the degree of intensity in the temper tantrums the boys are likely to throw. Possessiveness on this scale is a warning sign of future potential for abuse, and I'm not sure that's the direction you were planning on heading. In any case, you did leave it open to resolution, and the boys are on their way to learning a more humane (or feline) approach to relationships, so I still hold hope.
I'm also glad for Tien getting back in the game; he's definitely a heavy-hitter as far as the humans go, so it'll be interesting to see how you use him. Also curious as to whether or not you have other human survivors planned, now that I think of it. I recall Gohan's committing the name of his first alien victim Pan to memory, which got me wondering if there was a potential for Mr. Satan and Videl to possibly have (miraculously! Inconceivably!) been spared. Also wondering about Launch? I would ask questions about Tien's sexuality, but I don't find it really necessary to your story, and there are enough pairings going around already.
Frieza's relationship with his family was interesting-I find it curious that you've skipped ahead in Cooler's physical development to make him stronger than Frieza at this point in time (I seem to recall in his first movie special that he only recently-that is, before his landfall on Earth and after Frieza's death-gained the ability to transform, so I always believed him to be weaker than Frieza until that point, but with movies being so non-canon, it's hard to tell). His longing for Zarbon I thought was well-placed, and I think it serves to humanise him a bit more. Funny how the Saiyans are becoming more bestial and Frieza is becoming less so; it's an engaging dichotomy.
And finally we've arrived (sort of) at the destination! I can't wait to see what you do with Tarble and Gure. Also, let's hope the information the Saiyans might fight can help with their sexual dominance/possessiveness issues. I think at the end there might be a mix up with Tien and Chichi being the voice over the speaker, but maybe I read it wrong and Tien was on the other line too? Oh well.
Still a little nervous about Goku's ticker. We'll see how that goes with the information discs too, right? Right.
Welcome back, hon. A great upload and such a deep one at that. Don't have much time to leave a proper review but I do hope that your situation works out to a better place soon. Stay strong and remember to take care of yourself.
Wow. Just wow. This is by far one of the best DBZ fanfics I have ever had the pleasure of reading. Your writing is amazing and it is plain to see that you have put an amazing amount of though into each character's development and actions. You've made me love characters that I never thought I would, and go giddy over pairings I never even imagined. I am so exceited for your next chapter and can't wait! Thanks so much for making this piece of art :)
Oh my. I just discovered this story and have spent the last two days reading it in it's entirety. I have to say...it is amazing. You've obviously spent a lot of time thinking about the plot and how the storyline progresses and you've done a fantastic job. It reminded me a little bit of Against All Odds, but not enough to say it's similar.
Your description of characters is exceptional. While I've never imagined Radditz being gay (because well...he's Radditz), the way you write him has made it extremely believable. Even with a small blue cat. Your OC's are also well-rounded and I love how much time you put into describing every single character.
My only problem would be with Tien. I hope he gets a purpose soon, because to me he's seems like he's been nothing but dead-weight so far.
I'm very much looking forward to your next update and am very curious to find out how the plot progresses! Thank you for all your work.
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