its dark and angsty (which i LOVE), but beautiful too. i love how you set it up so everything is lowercased, and the sentences are different too. it just fits really well. i really hope you continue this. soon please? :) it has a lot of potential.

this was so sad! But it was beautiful. Good job, (:

Okay. You are seriously one of the best authors on here. Your character development in the first chapter is incredible. The writing style is amazing, too; the lowercase letters and the sentence fragments really portray the situation well, and make a subtle impact.

I'm really curious as to why and how this situation came about, with an abusive alcoholic for the father and a seemingly messed up mother.

How old are they in this story?

This has the potential to become one of the best stories on here. PLEASE continue it!

-Abby

That was great you have to update as soon as possible

Omg Its amazing! and Sad :(
More Please :)