I think you should make it a full fic. )

raraarrrrrr, I loveth it. It's a nice introspective piece on "whatcould'vebeen" and it had a nice pace set to it.

Oh, this is beautiful! For a moment there you had me convinced it was going to be an alternate-storyline idea of what would have happened, had he taken the Sanome fruit with him instead. That would have been an equally heart-wrenching story, but I have to admit I like this one's ending better. ;)

I'm adding this to the Silver Love comm; lovely and very well done!

hmm...if you do...I want Rakan in ficcy...please!

I really like this fic so far, so i'm guessing Chigusa was dreaming about having taken the girl instead of Rakan?

Hmm, not bad, not bad at all. I swear, at first I thought you were going to make Chigusa "straight" and fall for the girl sanome... (Which would have made me seething mad.) I'm so glad that wasn't the case. And it was very cute. The last paragraph was the stronest, I felt; I liked it the most as well. Nice job so far (if you continue, that is).