Another nice chapter. Too bad that you seemed to skip the hole in time between the mission and the chuunin exams.

I don't get why didn't Kodachi just ask who Ryoko's father is. It should be common sense to do so, all things considering.

So... you're going to focus on Ryoko's training now? I was under the impression that the girl was the strongest genin Konoha had, at the moment. Only her using the bokken is preventing her from showing everyone up with her unequaled prowess among her peers all the time. And you're going to put focus on getting her more powerful? Let me remind you that the training Naruto and Sasuke probably do at this part of the manga is totally skipped; it doesn't mean that they didn't train, Kishimoto just didn't deem it important to show. Remember that the team dynamic is drastically different this time around, Team 7 didn't do anything together outside of missions and possibly some team training, since Sasuke didn't want to do anything with the others and Sakura didn't want to do anything with Naruto. Well, Sasuke seems to be training, at least.

It's not that I'm complaining too much, but Ryoko is already heaps over her peers in ability and you're putting most of the concentration on her, regardless.

"“I don’t know,” Naruto said. “She’s just not…I don’t know…as enthused.”"

Naruto might be a bit out of his depth with that last word.

Looking forward to the next chapter.

Good chapter. Found this: "Elsewhere, Sousuke was practicing". I think you mean Sasuke, not Sousuke... :D

good stuff

Great chapter, once again. I like how you've put so much detail into the chi and their users.

Now for the (hopefully constructive) criticism. Please read these as suggestions, or as my opinions on things, meant to make you think about them yourself; not to say that "I'm right, you're wrong." I lack the patience to make it clear with each point that I'm not necessarily right and don't think that my opinion is necessarily correct and so on. So, here goes:

Kakashi seemed to be very underpowered in this chapter. He's supposed to be on a whole different level, compared to Naruto and Sasuke when it comes to anything that makes a shinobi. If Luta would have any sort of trouble with either Sasuke or Naruto, then Kakashi should rip her apart.

Are you straying from canon when it comes to Naruto's seal or how the Kyuubi's chakra behaves? He never had such freezing episodes in the manga nor did he consciously try -or need to- control the beast before PTS, to my knowledge. The seal effectively stopped any attempt that the Kyuubi might have made without any conscious effort from Naruto's part, it only became hard to control after Jiraiya tweaked with it during the training trip. I'm a bit puzzled why you decided to include Kyuubi into the fight, anyway. It's not like Naruto actually seemed to do anything with it, except to realize that the power was useless, or something.

Anyway, I find it rather annoying how suspectible ninja seem to be against chi adepts. It certainly isn't a flaw in the story, but I nevertheless find it annoying, like most I-win cards when it comes to comparing power levels between fighters. This is based on observation, though, so the difference in power might not be as glaring as I think. I don't know how powerful their opponent was supposed to be among chi users, after all.

And now for the definite errors in grammar and the such:

"This was responded with a shaking head and then a series of other gestures that seemed"

This paragraph seems to be missing some words.

"The Uchiha expected the woman to crumple to the ground from the strike after Naruto’s henged clone had been dispersed. Instead, _she_ her face flashed with anger and she whipped about to grab the young man."

extra word

"A growl started to work its way out of _throat_ and he barely dodged a golden wreathed strike before lashing outward, fingers curled unconsciously like claws."

Her or his throat?

"The trickle of yang he unconsciously allowed through was enough to _keep alive_, but not much more."

keep him alive

"_Uchiha_ could only vaguely see _glowing form_ of the woman charging out toward him."

The Uchiha; the glowing form

"Then Naruto was in the way, surrounded by a reddish glow and taking the witch-priestess’s blow before she could reach Sasuke, his feet digging a furrow into the ground behind him as _he_ teeth stood out sharply in an open mouthed grimace."

his teeth; and wouldn't the furrow be in front of Naruto, or is he taking the blow to his back? Maybe rephrase it to something like, "...his feet leaving a furrow into the ground in his wake..."?

"“Would you be interested in hiring a mission?” Kakashi wondered briefly if

suggesting this was okay, but there certainly was at least one precedent for an exchange of services."

Some trouble with the format, there.

Once again, great chapter with a pretty good fight scene (apart from the too easy dismissal of Kakashi at the start) and am looking forward to the next chapter.

My main problem with this story is that it keeps feeling more and more like a Naruto fic with arbitrary characters inspired by Ranma characters rather than a proper Naruto-Ranma crossover. (Never a good thing regardless of the source series involved)

Wow! This story is unexpectedly good for a crossover with original characters. I really like your characters of Ryoko and Jusebi(sp?). What impresses me most is the way you've had chakra and chi work, and that neither type seems to have a real distinct advantage over the other, and you have clear concise systems behind their interactions that are well thought out and balanced. As rare as good, non-mary-sue OCs are, especially if they come from the Ranmaverse and aren't insane, that doesn't impress me quite as much as the clear system, as plenty of authors make good original characters, (although not in fanfiction usually) but it is hard to find good systems behind two types of energy manipulation mystical arts found in different settings that mesh them together so well. I was hesitant to read this at first because of what I'd realized it was, but I got bored and read further since it was updating regularly and I'd caught up on all the stuff I was following, and I was quite impressed. This has been added to my favorite stories list, and if updates retain this quality or improve, I might be adding you to my favorite authors list.

THis story would be even better if you found someway to restore Kodatchi's sight and voice. I dob't like the idea of any character other then originals being robbed of anything as their voice and sight.

wow!

Awesome, please update soon :)

cool

Nice chapter, and you side stepped the Wave arc?! Oh joy! Not much more to say about it in general, though, except that I liked it.

"Anyway, she was supposed to be practicing that “tree-climbing” technique the medical ninjas instructing her had talked about. Something about sharpening her _chi control_."

Did you really mean chi control?

"“Wow, the people here are angry,” Naruto said, looking around."

Would Naruto notice something like this? I'd think that it's pretty much the norm for him.

Looking forward to the next chapter, keep up the good work.

I don't know what your outline looks like, but I'm surprisingly interested in how the Saotome daughters merge into the society of Konoha.

I liked the chapter and I find myself warming up to Ryoko, as well. I have to say that I had my doubts about her and her sister, considering that she's very strong and has what would be considered a bloodline limit in Narutoverse. Her sister seemed to know and have skills to do stuff that an academy student has no business doing. The interaction between Ryoko and Naruto is somewhat painful to read, though, she's such a doormat when not fighting. Hope she gains a bit self confidence.

Anyway, in my opinion, the conclusion for the shadow clone memory transfer came way too easily to those observing. It's not like the other clones and Naruto weren't observing Ryoko while they fought. Even an idiot would get an exact repetition after a few times. Another thing in the fight is that every clone opted for single combat for some reason, which just isn't Naruto's fighting style when it comes to kage bunshin. It would be one thing if Ryoko was making it so that they could only get in range one by one by running away and evading them, but this wasn't the case. I'm not complaining about Naruto losing, mind you; it's clear that he would lose to someone with nearly jounin level taijutsu, but the way he fought didn't seem like his style to me.

Now, the real clincher is if Ryoko is going to mention this ability of the jutsu to Naruto or not. I'm getting the feeling that she won't, though, even if that would be a splendid factor to use veering the fic off course from canon a bit. At least he'll start to get better in tactics with his bunshin earlier, due to having someone to fight regularly.

Looking forward to the next chapter.

I'm looking forward to the first time she takes something Sasuke says as a challenge :) who knows, might even help pull that stick out of his... well, you get the idea.
Also looking forward to if/how Kakashi changes the training, given that he's got someone who just might be able to consciously toss genin around like sticks, as opposed to Naruto getting ramped up and berserking

That last bit was pretty funny. :D

"“How about Haruna?”" Who?? You mean Sakura?