OMG! That was real deep!I liked it! Can read and review my story? I'd really appreciate that. I give this story 5 stars!

Does this continue? 0o0 Cause it's not on complete and it seems pretty completed to me.

Well, you could maybe split up the paragraphs a little more. It's not as bad as some that I've seen, but it doesn't help the eye very much either. There were a lot of places that you could've split up the paragraphs...find them :D You can do it!

Overall, this was a sad piece...-cries- I loved it :D