Nice job so far

nice begining and ideas. this is a keeper. please update soon

good chapter :)

loved it three! ;)

I love this story so far!
The english is brilliant and it makes sense.

interesting

This sounds like a good start. I wonder what's gonna happen with Charlie Gunner (BTW, nice name) and Kamikirimusi. Will there be other love interests along the way and what path will he take.

Please update soon.