I like what you have started here, but I think you may want to tone down your descriptiveness just a little bit. Don't get me wrong, I love a Tolkien-esque description of minute details as much as any other literature nerd, but it can be a little exhausting to read. Otherwise, great job! Looking forward to more! :)

sound intresting and the first chapter was good too. Hope to read more soon!

wow..very interesting

Ohh Francesca is evil! Haha! And I love it! This was just so awesome! Makes me so wanna read what's gonna happen next! I mean poor Koenma! *hugs Koenma close*

Oh oh and is Kurama gonna end up with Francesca? *ducks behind Jin* Really I had to say it at least once!

Anyways I soo can't wait for more!

Your writing continues to amaze me. I can't wait for more of this one, especially. You know how much I love these particular pairings, and Yusuke in general. x3