wow, awesomeness! im literally on the edge of my seat reading this thing!

cant wait 4 more!

OMG, why do you have to make it a cliffhanger? I hate cliffhangers!! But it was a good chapter. XD I'm wondering if Camille will actually want to be rescued now. I liked Batman's interrogation, by the way. It reminded me of the one in The Dark Knight! Update soon!

Okay, you've definitely caught my interest. Camille doen't seem to be an irritating Mary Sue. We'll see.

Btw, this isn't gonna be one of those Joker romance stories is it?

It's good to learn a little bit about Camille's past..although I'm not sure that 'I woke up one day and started hacking' is a valid explanation...where did she learn the skills? Did she have friends to help her? You mentioned the dare to hack into the hospital, and from that alone it seems like her 'friends' were much older than she was, and probably the type of people who would also influence her into cutting and anorexia. I'd like to see more of this Camille (who I imagine in punked out clothes, dark makeup and a hairstyle so radically different that Jason wouldn't even recognize her), and I think the 'fire' the Joker is referring to is this past anger and rebelliousness that she has tried to bury for so long. I hope you continue to develop this side of her. Again, not to sound like I know anything at all about hacking, but quitting at fifteen and then not taking it up again until 26 leaves a lot of software developments, security and firewalls out of the picture. Technology advances at a rapid pace...she would be pathetically outdated by now.

Could an alternate be that she still hacks INTO systems out of boredom...but never changes anything, deletes records, or steals? This would be an interesting development, Camille the Banker, girlfriend of a city cop, honest and hard working...and her darker alter ego, a shadow from the past she can only placate, never rid herself of? Your fic is quite suspenseful because I can't tell if Camille is going to be rescued from the Joker, or voluntarily join his side. You've developed a rounded character who is quite capable of doing both! So update soon, because I want to know what happens!

I like that you have distinguished her from the Joker. Whereas he enjoys violence, she turned from her life of hacking and cruelty after her father nearly died. I find it interesting the commraderie she has developed with the Joker at the end, smiling at his observations. Either she feels sure that her skills will keep her alive, or she is beginning to develop Stockholm Syndrome-bonding with her captors.

One more thing: the Batman's entry. I loved it! 'Is now a bad time?' I think you've captured the frustration Harvey Dent had in TDK when waiting for him to show up...and then his surprise at his sudden appearance. Gordon's reassurance that he will indeed appear hints at his confidence in the vigilante-his sense of pride in knowing the Batman can always be trusted. I'd love to see more Gordon/Jason and Gordon/Batman interaction in this piece. We know so much about Camille, but you've shown us little about Jason. As they are in a relationship, he is a part of her. Developing him as an OC will bring out yet another side of Camille for us.

Thanks for another great chapter...sorry if I'm reading into things way too much. Update soon!

It's nice to get to know Camille a little better. Makes me feel kind of sorry for her. :-( Another good chapter. I liked it when she was running from the car. I'd love to read what happens next!

This is really good so far. It caught my attention an dkept it. The character's lines are good too. I canhear the Joker saying it! Hope you keep writing.

Now they're really starting to get to know each other! I was postive that he wouldn't kill her...yet even after that little escape attempt. ;)

Hmm...definitely an interesting start. I'm especially interested in why you chose to call it nine lives. Is Catwoman going to be involved? Or is there another reason? The fact that Camille is familiar with hacking is quite intriguing...but if she does have a past, it might be best to let us know that up front. You run the risk of Mary Sue with Superpowers if she develops vital skills to save her life everytime something goes wrong.

You did an excellent job showing us her frustration at her cancelled lunch plans. I could picture her zipping herself up in that A line shirt quite vividly. Dressing up on a Saturday, and missing a date, ugh! You also establish a firm relationship (although somewhat ambiguous) between her and Jason. Camille wants to marry him, and from their phone conversation it seems he genuinely cares for her. I hope you continue to develop these OC's for us.

You also firmly established the 'just another day' feeling. Walking into the bank, the monotony, the fleeting, bored wondering how much money HAD she passed through her hands? What did billionaires do in their spare time, etc. really brought this feeling home. She is clearly an intelligent woman, rsdily bored with meager tasks.

Just a few critiques: A sheriff would not really be working in Gotham City. Sheriffs deal with areas outside city limits, rural areas in the county. Gotham seems large enough to me that it's suburbs probably spread into several counties. If he must remain Sheriff, give us an explanation as to why he is here, working in Gotham, clearly outside his jurisdiction. Possibilities include he is tracking the Joker (if he escaped from County...but you've already said Arkham), or if he believes a criminal with an issued warrant is currently in the Joker's employ..or perhaps he was just there, in the bank, when the robbery went down.

Also, dialogue. Try the House MD approach: barely intelligible technical jargon creates a much more realistic feel. Don't be afraid to do a little research into police terminology and negotiation tactics.

Bringing Gordon in at the end is a very nice touch. It appears he has a close relationship with Jason. I hope you explore this a little more in future chapters. If Camille does turn out to have a bit of a past, it will be interesting to see how Gordon and Jason handle it, as I assume a friend of Gordon's would share his same values.

I'm putting this one on story alert! Hope you get around to updating soon!

Wow, really great descriptions and action sequences. I look forward to reading more!

You really know how to right a story! If I were Camille, I would be cursing myself right now for going to work in the first place.

This whole thing just really caught my attention and kept it. I hope you update again soon, I'd love to see what happens next! =)