hi are you continueing this story?

Okay so I reread chapter 3 to try and clear things up so Sarah is mom Joshua is son the question is who is dad? Well you put that Joshua would meet uncle charlie meanig chuck wanting him to know one of the few true friends his father had and the only person who ever told chuck that was Bryce (I really don't like this) so he's the father but the kid has Wavy light brown hair which kinda sounds like chuck? Anyways in the other chapters you had Sarah wanting a kid (Joshua) with chuck so I don't get how Bryce is the dad what event made that happen? Gr dude if ur gonna be a charah writter some advice don't make stories where Sarah or chuck has a kid but not w/ eachother especially when we know they both care for eachother and would never ever in A billion katrillion years do something like that.

Sarah slept with a Mark and has his kid?

While I love Children and I am expecting one of my own I do not really want to read of Sarah making a mistake getting pregnant with the Mark's kid.

If that is where you are going with this please PM me.

Thanks.

Please explain to me in a PM how Sarah has a kid. Obviously it is not Chuck's.

Also this story still makes no sense. Just come out and tell me already. I don't want to have to get 12 chapters in to find out Sarah screwed some mark and got pregnant or she was screwing some other guy behind Chuck's back and got pregnant.

I was stoked to see that you updated this, and I was not disappointed. It will be interesting to see just how this night with the kids plays out for poor Chuckles. Thanks for sharing!

sorry, descriptive but short. It has been a very long time since last update. Thanks

I like it.

I think this is a very interesting premise you have going, and I'd really love to see it continued. One of the things I really like about it is it strays from what so many other fanfic authors do, in that they always make Chuck the "I love kids" guy, but you went another route, which is interesting. Also, were he to ever find out just what Sarah is hiding from him, I'd think he'd be quite hurt that she hid it from him. There are just so many interesting things that you could explore with the start you had, and I hope that you pick it back up at some point. If you want any help with it, or need anything, just PM me, and I'd be glad to volunteer. Thank you for sharing, and I hope you will choose to share more of this story with us :)

Hm. Each chapter adds another piece to the puzzle, but none of them are connected as of yet. I like to think I'm good at puzzles, and trying to predict where the story is going, but I'm at a loss for this one. It is too disjointed and random currently. I agree with the previous comments concerning length in order to add more information per chapter, it would help a lot with the confusion.

-- Mensch

a lil bit short, give us some more :)

This story keeps getting more confusing. You say that their will be Chara. You tell us to stick it out. Yet this story makes no sense. So far I see that Sarah has a kid, or wait now they are babysitting Casey's say what. Yet the dad is supposed to be dead. Those three things don't add up at all.

You are 4 chapters in and nothing makes sense. I think you need to make your chapters longer they are way too short. Also if Sarah slept with Bryce or anybody else besides Chuck and had their kid good luck selling that one.

Basically this reads like Sarah needs a baby daddy. Please make some sense of this because I have never been so lost in a story that is 4 chapters in.

Ok, not making much sense here. You are skipping around like crazy. Hope you can clear this up soon. Thanks.

hm interesting I guess. I have to agree with spartan117 on this one. With how S and C feel about each other I can't imagine her having a child with anyone else. Let alone Bryce whom I'm guessing is the father.

uhm actually i didn't really get this chapter, maybe because it's very short, but i guess next chapter will have more details.

A little confused still, but I like it, it's interesting, keep it up!