Great story so far, please update soon!

I hope Zell can realise what Seifer means! Oh they're so cute together!

This story is great! I can't wait for chapter 14, which I hope is coming out soon because it has been quite a while since this story was last updated. But don't get me wrong the longer it takes to update a story the better it is right?

I like this so far. I'm a big fan of Seifer/Zell, although I dislike Squall/Irvine. The baby project was really amusing and Selphie and the GFs made me laugh.

I would like to point out though that you tend to have a few spelling errors. Most of them are just missing a letter or hitting the wrong key, but it does occur a bit too frequently. Simply rereading it will let you catch most of them.

I'll enjoy reading the next chapter when it's up.

~Wizard

i need to say that i've thoroughly enjoyed reading your story up until this point! i can't say that i'm a huge fan of yaoi, but you've kindasorta got me hooked here! congrats! :) i'll be waiting for the next chapter!

-fp

I must admit I absolutely loathe Rinoa. So any Rinoa bashing is fine in my books. She just gets in the way sometimes and what happens when her dog dies? No more limit break?

Your Irvine is such a drama queen...it's great!
'To the better looking, he went a step further and blew them kisses.' Can you imagine someone doing that in reality to other guys? Probably not. I like where this new Irvine is going. He's more of a romantic at heart than a common household **.

Zell is cute and your reformed Seifer is so cuddly. Keep it comming!

Damn it! ended too soon! i still want Leon with Cloud but i actually like Seifer and Zell...though i'm not a big fan of Squall with Irvine...i will keep reading for the SeiferZell...it will always make me sad though that Leon is not with Cloud...they have too much in commen not to love eachother...both changed because of a war/fight, both have very caring friends...and i love VINCENT VALENTIN!! sorry that had nothing to do with anything lol

AW...i was hoping it was cloud...so mean *cries*

Oh damn! Thank goodness I didn't blurt out the wrong character. I know who it is now:D

I always thought that Selphie would make a very psychadelic mom but after reading your story so far I can sense that she may have been dropped or excessively shaken as a child. That is, she is a complete nut case. Love the whole Gigi thing.

As for Seifer...could this new found jealousy open his eyes to the prize before him?? I'm curious to see how Zell's cousin gets along with Zell and Seifer. Bring on the chapters.

XD wow by the sounds of that Cloud's coming, as he's the only person I can remotely think of with a similar hair colour blonde in the FF universe.

XD Leon x Cloud huh :P second fav pairing of all time if thats the case. I shall be all dramatic and tell you to do it perfect. *is joking* but I'm sure I'll love it. They are always so funny together XD both such grouches.

I'm rather curious over who's going to end up with Squall now...poor Squall the decisions, he better be careful I'm sure Rinoa won't be too happy about all of this for sure.

Flashback was sad, can picture that happening in an orphanage all the time. Happy they found someone but at the same time terribly jealous and sad.

Look forward to the next chapter XD and finding out who these pairings are.

Gold

~You're no prize in my eyes, boy. I enjoy looking at that headmaster of yours.~

WHAT? The thing in my head is gay and interested in my gunblade rival?

~I see Shiva behind his eyes.~

That has to be the funniest part in the story so far, just the mortification Seifer is going through at that moment halarious.

And the embarrassing tickle fight must of been a sight to see for Quintis who I think was really well written by the way, the strict big older sister type. She seemed to soften completely at their childishness. Really hope to see some more of her, although clueless as to who you can pair her with unless its Selphie, she's such a serious gentle soul.

And Squall! XD I'm sorry I'm biased as I'd be going for a Squall x Irvine pairing, one because its again such a rare paring these days. That and I just love Irvine to pieces, the boyish flirt who really doesn't know what he wants half the time, a relationship between them would be fascinating. Plus Irvine is just so pretty like XD

Whoever you want to pair him with though is fine though of course XD as this is Squall the main character of everything. If this was a KH fic I'd be screaming Cloud...Leon x Cloud forever!! lol but it's not XD so I go for Irvine at this point in time.

Good chapter :)

Gold

'He didn't fancy getting punched in the face' That made me laugh XD as it seemed just like Irvine to think of his own safety first.

Other parts in these chapters I loved was Irvine's fear of Rinoa getting her hands on the baby to protect his grade. And Seifer's musings of soft XD XD that was adorable. Temptation already!

Lol way cute :)

Gold

I know you already know what I think about all these chapters. But I figure it'd be nice to review every second chapter or so until I get to parts you don't know what I think on it.

*snickers* the hotdog part will forever be one of my favourite scenes,seems like such a Zell like thing to do. How innocent Zell is over being friends is rather cute. The pair are really good together I shall heart Seifer x Zellness <3 <3

Keep writing :)

Lol liked the bickering between them all, and how Seifer groaned over the whole not sleeping on the floor deal. XD it's like the pair don't know what to do around each other.

And Selphie is cute lol like how terrible she is with her baby Gigi.

Gold

I reckon I know who it is...but I'll wait just in case:D

The romantic and sexual tension is just killing me and Zell's blushing is not helping either (that's why I love this pairing). Loved the flashback to Seifer's childhood. It's cute how they use the word 'love' so freely, but get so insecure with the word when they're older. Zell was all angelic innocence which is very...Zell! As for Seifer I like the whole internal struggle between jealousy and loneliness. It fits really well, because I don't see Seifer mourning the loss of Quistis;p

Perhaps this might be the reason why Seifer turned to the darkside? The jealousy of not being accepted into a family formed into a quest to become a knight. Seifer and Edea (sorceress) shared a really twisted mother-son relationship! Similarly, Seifer might have always felt as if he was in the 'background' which might explain his huge ego and his bullying nature (to strike constant fear)to become the centre of attention. I think your characterisation of the children fits really well (IMO)with the game.

I'm wondering about the line:
“He was killed by a fiend when he wondered off the protected path leading from Balamb city to the Garden. He was drunk and wanted to see me...” Zell wouldn't meet Seifer's eyes.

Zell's response opens up a lot of possibilities. Was Zell's adoptive father going home to beat Zell OR going home to molest Zell OR to beat Ma but Zell intervened and got a whacking instead?

Loved the chapter and Selphie waffling on! I love her lack of common sense (I reckon she would have gladly taken candy from strangers as a child). Your Squall was suprisingly funny in a really deadpan-ish sort of way which is quite refeshing considering most people still cast him as a broody and mute teenager.

So I'm guessing that this new character will attract the attention of a certain leather bound headmaster. I'm just wondering whether there will be some cousin rivalry for a certain emerald eyed blonde adonis?

"Squall has an interesting dream about a guy, but just who was it and why would Squall be having dreams like that?" OH PLEASE LET THIS GUY BE Cloud FROM FF7! I BEG YOU! I LOVE THEM AS I COUPLE!!

by the way, love this! i am actually not getting any sleep because my mind can not stop wondering what is ganna happen! PLEASE UPDATE SOON! AND PUT Leon and Cloud TOGETHER! I'M ON MY KNEES!...sorta...well bye!