Wow. Midnighter's influence I'm seeing here? : /

Cute. You should listen to Livin' on a prayer.

Nice. Although you could elaborate a little more on how her powers developed until this point and the background on how Nita and Kit's lives have developed up until that point, details are important even if you only take on paragraph to describe all the past events. I couldn't tell other than Kit's dialogue line about work and a boss how old they were and what they've been doing.

Overall a well written story, though it could use small amounts of more detail.

I really like your work by the way! =)

-Don "QuixoticQuest"

i ususaly dont like storys where they are adults, but this one was very sweet, and i liked it, nicely written

Kit's really sweet! Poor Nita though... Great story!
Update soon!

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OMG!! So sweet!!

This one-shot is good. I like how you made Nita powerful though poor her for the price she had to pay. I hope you keep writing.