Grammer's a little sketchy but besides that, amazing. Keep it up!

wow this is a lame story... either fix the mistakes or take the crap down

I just read this story of fictionpress. word for word. is that you that posted it or did someone steal your story?

Wo.
I like the lil rivalry between shawn and corey.
Your doing great.

I'm still readin! Keep em coming. I'm liking it.

Grt Chap. I wanna see more of Shawn he seems badass lol

I like ur flashbacks

plz make more i love the story so far. keep em coming!

Interesting. Definately a good read so far. I can care less about the spelling mistakes and such. Love it, keep it up! :)

Your updating quickly. That's a plus.
Great job.

Great story. I like how you have little flashback of where they were when it happened and then suddenly cut away to present time, gives suspense. Anyways like the guy. A couple reviews below me. No critism yet. Ill deff be adding this to my favs

Update!

I gotta say this is...AWSOME!.

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did i tell you im in luv with this stry!

this story has potential to be one of the best on here keep it up.

Clap clap clap for a job well done.