lol cute, thats a really cute story. i like that story. good job

"Oh. You." That literally brought a smile to my face. Basil's lack of excitement to her appearance is very much in character. Hitting his head on Olivia's ceiling was quite amusing too.

Might I add when you have two characters talking, they should have their own line. For example, you have two characters talk back and forth in the same paragraph. I could follow who was saying what, but it would be easier for others to follow along if one character spoke on one line and the next character spoke on the next line. Also some of the dialogue sounded too modern (i.e. the line Olivia says about kicking Basil's butt at Chess). May want to consider rephrasing sentences if you're trying to keep it in the Victorian era.

And I'm with Megana. The story still ends in mystery. Why did her father take the socks and buy new ones without telling her? Was he using them for a bunch of dolls? All in all it was a nice little story. I'd like to see more writing in the future either on it or something new. :)

Where to begin, where to begin...

First of all, this was a cute & adorable story all around! ^_^ The writing was excellent & endearing in every way, you did a great job expanding on Olivia's character, the dialogue was clever & charming, you demonstrated the interactions among the characters very well, the plotline was adorable, & I even got a few chuckles out of reading this! :D Keep up the good work, & do continue writing GMD fanfiction, because I'd love to see what other wonderful "tails" you can come up with! :D

Great job! ^_^

With much love & admiration,
The Mouse Avenger

You really got the characters of Olivia and Basil down pat here- beautiful descriptions too, especially of Basil hitting his head against the ceiling of Olivia's bedroom. You could probably write some great GMD stuff if you set your mind to it. My one complaint is what you yourself mentioned- getting lazy at the end. It shows. You were doing so marvelously up until that point, and then it seems you rushed the entire story after that, which turned out anti-climatic in a disappointing way for this bit of fluff.

What was Flaversham doing that decimated his daughter's entire sock supply anyway? :)