ha, I missed a word. spun around and spook for the first time

My fault. ^^; Spook to spoke. :P

I really liked it but be more clear with the people talking such as putting names on before or after. If you are trying to keep it a mystery put son, daughter, or father in front of it. Um what else. Good job at the beginning of the story I like the mystery of it but try to remember not to lose your readers by confusing them. GOOD JOB!

This looks promising so far. Thanks for posting.