 fiction-gal 2009-09-22 . chapter 6 Ok since im too lazy to log in, im just going to review like this :)
I think this is very good, well written, and so far not too bad of a plot line.
I would suggest trying to keep to a steady time, since some people would get confused, and when times skip around like this, it can make it hard for the writer (you) to pick up mistakes. But this is ok too.
Well im going to take a guess at who is under the cloak and I think its Sam :D
Have a great day!
~FG |