it's so twilight.

Hm, definiutly (I can never spell that damn word right!) interesting. Compelling... though the time change was slightly confusing, I'm assuming that the divider was Keep your distance? wasn't too clear, but other than that... keep it coming!

Oh... interesting...

Warm v. Cold v. human girl!?

And Laguna the vampire... hehehehe, what will he be like? I don't honestly know why, but that makes me laugh, though makes complete sense. he would be the one to go against the crowd. Keep em comin.

Hehe!

nice explaination for Zell's tatoo. And uh... at least Rinoa has somewhat normal reaactions huh? Poor Squall, doesn't have a clue what he's gotten himself into does he?

Hm. Interesting... Wonder what got squall to finnaly talk to her? Loose then Regain controll? Most, interesting. It's like two of the best romances ever in one... hehehe. Sweet job! ^_^

That bit in the beggining made me have a flash back. I used to have my dog go out running as he pulled me on my bike as I held his leash... At one point he saw a squirl and stopped, The leash was attached to the bike so that stopped, next thing I knew I was flying over the handle bars landing on my back... who that was a while ago.

Anywho, can't beleive her ma did that. I mean... poor Cid... poor Rin. Irvine as always is a bundle of laughs and Zell all to willing to help... And Squall... hm... angst angst angst angst angst... I love it!

It's totally oblivious that you inspired from twilight!!
I see the line where you say it after reading, so I wasn't influenced.
Nice work, just hope you won't follow the movie to the letter because there will be no surprise ^^

i like the fact that you drew inspiration from twilight, yet aren't following the exact layout of that book. it shall be interesting to see where you go with this!

ps: zell as the mike newton character is an awesome choice! :) i can totally see it, hahah!

Knowing that Twilight was inspiration and reading about the rain... I was half expecting to read forks instead of Balamb... Hehe! Anywho I once thought about doing something similar to this but knew I wouldn't have the patience, so I hope you continue with this!

And on a side note just one thing gramatically I did notice...

Everyone else seemed significant in the room compared to him.
Significant or Insignificant?

Other than that it looks pretty good... can't wait for more!

Ah i'm quite intrigued by this story. I ususally don't enjoy fics were the characters are much younger/schoolfics but i think you've handled this nicely and i look forward to an update ^^ I like your writing style too. very fluent. you should have a look at some of my work if you get a chance =] ~xx

Sounds very interesting, I'll be looking forward to more!

Pretty good first. I like it... although I like anything Squinoa haha. Keep up the good work d-('.')-b