please make more, i adore them

Aww, i really liked this story ^^
I think Youruichi and Kisuke are a cute couple!
You should make another chapter ;]

~RarusuRinnu1310~

I'M IN LOVE WITH THIS STORY! They are the perfect couple, and I would KILL to dance with Kisuke! I need to write some more of my stories, and you gave me a perfect inspiration to do it. I may be rambling, but this ROCKS! You're an amazing writer. I'm done now...
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This was really good. It was very well written in description. The emotions was nicely put and it was great how much the explanation between the two. There were some things that need to be explained though. Why do they rival against each other? Why do they think that they shouldn't date at first but later on they approved as a couple? Was it because she was royalty and he was a fellow commoner?
That aside, I liked the kissing at the bar scene and the dance was very small but otherwise nicely written. It was cute. I love this pairing. It's the best.
Well, cya around then.
PS: Seeing how it's a one shot, are you going to make a different story but something similar to this one or this one-shot will turn into a long series of events?

Hey! I got your PM, and I'm sorry I'm a little late at reading this. >< School, I tell ya. Haha
For your first Bleach story, it was pretty good.
At first it seemed sort of too factual, but I saw you were trying to lay out the story.
So that was pretty good. :D
Haha The chemistry between Yoruichi and Kisuke is funny. I loved it!
Good story, I must say. Nice job.

This is a good start. But I'm going to be honest. It may need a little more detail. Try to draw the reader into the story by describing the atmosphere and the emotions of the characters.
However, I really like the idea. I'm interested to see what you decide to do with this.

Very good! I enjoyed reading them in a formal atmosphere, especially when they're in such a playful mood and getting along for once!

Overall, I like the idea of them playing such a joke on their friends and then realizing that they actually have feelings for each other. It's got a good solid base to it. The one thing that I do notice however, is that it lacks a lot of detail in places. Portions of it seem to move very fast, and have almost a "this happened, then this happened, then this happened" without much explanation, which makes the overall fic feel rather rushed. Which is a shame. I think you could improve on it by taking a moment to slow down and add a bit more description to things. You could also try using longer, more complex sentances. For instance, rather than "She did this. She was also really good and they liked her" try something like "In addition to the things that she did, she was a very good person and well-liked because of it". It flows a bit better, and doesn't seem as choppy. Overall, it was very cute to read and I enjoyed it. I hope my review is helpful to you. ^__^

That was awesome you should make more!!

Cute Story ;)

YES, you should make more UraharaYoruichi fanfics!! (I'm also going to reply to your Pm so hang on :D)

Very Nice! I liked it :)
Yoruichi's playful side was well represented and Urahara was docile, just as he is in the anime!
I think you did a good job portraying their relationship! I always imagine yoruichi to be the one in charge!