|Reviews for A Beautiful Mess|
| A Morning Star 7/12/10 . chapter 1
Great narration. People writing first person have a tendency to say 'silly' [dumb to me] things that try to make the character sound unique. You didn't do that. I am grateful.
I did like the bit about James being really...Disheveled, I guess, and Lily wanting to fix it.
As long as this isn't one of of those stories where James is utterly in love with Lily and has been 'chasing her for six years.' Really. That just alienates me, because I know that's not how it works. People have primary interests and other interests. Yeah, I 'like,' Rachel,' but I'll just as soon go out with Michelle. I think a lot of female authors forget that. I guess it all really depends on your audience, but a lot of successful TV series use 'rising tension,' like Bones.
Hard to explain. I think you know what I mean, sorry if some of this review isn't directly relevant to your story, I really need to get to sleep, though, work tomorrow. Looking forward to your update.
| Pyromaniac-Girl 6/17/09 . chapter 2
That was a good chapter!
I really liked Lily's reaction to waking up early, it was very funny and her mother was funny as well.
What a great role reversal at the end! James Potter reminding Lily about a meeting, I can't wait to read more, and I one day aim to find out where I can buy Pop-tarts. How many flavours are there?
I hope that you will have an interesting day (and will forgive me for the excessive use of exclamtion marks in this review)!
| IM GONE WITH THE WIND 6/14/09 . chapter 2
Ah, I love the length of this story - not to mention the detail. I can't wait to see how they actually get together in the end. (:
| Adalon Ithilriel 6/14/09 . chapter 2
Great story! I really like the way you portrayed Lily and Petunia's relationship in the first chapter and how much James annoys Lily in the second.
Update soon please!
| Vampires and Penguins 6/9/09 . chapter 2
Wow- great chapter! It's nice the way Lily is seeing the slight change in James, and I love it!
Can't wait for more! :))
| An Aspiring Author 6/8/09 . chapter 2
lovely story! cant wait to see how it develops! please update asap!
| LemonLime165 6/8/09 . chapter 2
love the story, its amazing
| Amzyy 6/1/09 . chapter 1
Hey! I enjoyed reading the first chapter! I can't wait for the second! I like your writing style...Update Soon! :D
| AllyKitten 5/29/09 . chapter 1
you write really well. cant wait to see where you take this. i just do happen to be a big Jason Mraz and Sarah Dessen fan, so i am glad that i found another. update soon.
| Pyromaniac-Girl 5/28/09 . chapter 1
I really enjoyed reading that story.
The relationship between Petunia and Lily was fantastic; commplicated yet at the base of it they do love each other, I think it is very realistic.
My only two questions about it are: 1. Were there really 'pop-tarts' in England at the time when this was set as, living in England myself, I have only heard of them in fanfictions and didn't quite understand what they were until my American e-mail correspondent explained them to me, then again I may just be extremly dense and missing them in the shops if so: Sorry!
2. When will you be updating it? I can't wait to read more and I am sorry if I seem rude asking about pop-tarts, I always say such rude things to people.
I hope that you will have a fantastic day!
| Vampires and Penguins 5/28/09 . chapter 1
Wow- you have me hooked! I love it! I can't wait for another update! And I've listened to Jason Mrazs' song- I can get the title now!
Th depth that you've gone into with the explanation of Lily and Petunias relationships and personalities is fantastic! I know that this is going to be an amazing fanfic. Well, it already is!