Thumbs up! :D

I love every line you write, but that last line?

Made of complete and utter WIN.

*does happy jig* I knew it, i knew it, i knew it! It was Dean!

*sniff* such a sweet moment for the boys.

**applauds**

way to take a creative leap and nail it!

very amazing story, well done. WRITE ON!

I gotta say sometimes it really is true that if it weren't for bad luck the Winchesters wouldn't have any luck at all. I am almost certain now that the brother who was carried away by the beastie is Dean.

I /think/ it's Dean who's lost his memory. Update as soon as you can, please!

Yay! Finally I had the time to catch up. But you play with me - which brother? Did I miss it? Ah! Wonderful work, my ninja friend!

That is Dean in every thought and detail and so very grousom and adventure.

Very nicely done!

Through word choice and inner dialogue, you've managed to cleary identify the 'narrator' of the tale easily.

This story has been about word choice, phrasing, and style and I mean that as a compliment! The story, the actual meat of the story is there and as compelling as ever. It's the word-geek in me that is distracted by shiny literary baubels. Oh, I like THAT phrasing or Hee, great verbal picture.

Which means you've done an awesome job of combining function and form!

Wow! I knew it! It's Dean isn't it? Please if you reply don't tell me, or I'll quit reading! *serious menacing face*. Haha, no seriously, don't tell me please.

Wow (again) this is awesome. I love how you take the dream from where it ended in the previous chapter and put it here.

I'll keep reading... Wait... Where's the next chapter! NO! Where is it? Please update son! NO! *sobs and tears* NO! *hands over the face*

Sorry, I'm being dramactic. Please, update soon. I know now why you get the atention with your stories so much. You don't give classes to write like you do? By any chance? That'll be awesome.

I'm dying to read the next chapter, so please, really, update soon. I'll be waiting. And thanks for giving me another reason to break my skull thinking! XD Bye.

Oh, cheching "Touched by Fire" by the way.

Oh my! I read the word alone "Done?" but too quick and I saw it as "Dean", but then you didn't tell us who this is? So, it's freaking perfect!

I'm catch with it! I believe the one who's injured is Sam, honestly, but I guess I'll find out soon. Though there's no many options between Sam or Dean.

Excelent work, I'm impressed actually *eyebrows lifted in awe* Seriously, this is great.

Oh, Oh, I got it wrong! I thought the creature was called "Talon" since I've heard that name before, but now I know what that word means.

Oh, this is going better, the same dream, just longer. I still can't tell who's the main! Argh! You're doing an amazing job and I'm breaking my brian trying to figure out who's the one who lost his memory!

Excelent! And it started as a experiment! I can't imagine how would end if it would be an actual non experimental story. This is awesome!

What I really like about this is the fact that you have no idea who is thinking! I mean, could be either Sam or Dean or probably neither of them!

This is cool, way cool, and I'm gonna keep reading. I also gotta say that the way you write it's completely awesome, I feel the words strong when I read them, and that's something that not every writer has or is capable to achieve, but you? You make it look easy.

Congratulations.

M. J. Márquez.

great story as always

Ahah! I was right in my guess as to which brother was the injured one. Nice job getting the personality across even when he was completely out of it... is completely out of it.

That certainly sounds like something that would happen to them. The image of the bird monster carrying him around like that reminded me of when my cat caught a live robin in its mouth and pranced around the yard with it for an hour. The bird lived, though. Very nice image with that - even the creature has an attitude.

"Worried, he craned his neck to get a look and noted with relief that his brother seemed okay." I like that you use Dean's habit of concern for Sam even when he's in dire trouble. Although, it makes me sad to remember that we've kind of lost that on the show. Doesn't look like it's coming back much, but we'll see.

You have some very nice images in this chapter, like "...slugs pierced exposed skin like darts through paper." Ew, but very cool. Your descriptions give me a pretty clear look at what's going on, though kind of glossed with the haze Dean is in.

When I started reading this chapter, I just remembered that you left us at a very bad place in the remembrance part, what with leaving us hanging at the edge of a cliff and all. ;) However, it was worth the wait.

Awesome chapter, and I can't wait for more.

Holly