Awesome story so far. Please oh please finish it! :D

wow! thanks for the explination...I thought Tori was older than that.

Very good story. Please continue when you can! :)

i have a question why can everyone see ryan and dana together i mean he is a rapist and she is naked u would think he would try to rip her apart and/or rape her not date her

a really good story is like gold everyone loves it

"All the ghost, even Ryan, were worried about her."

No he wasn't.

"Ryan watched the young ghost, concerned. He had grown attached to her in the past month."

No he didn't.

"Ryan stroked the glass where her head lay, imagining to himself that he was stroking her hair."

No he wouldn't.

You know why? He HATED women with a fiery passion. He also ABHORRED all human contact. He couldn't stand being touched. Why would he desire to touch a girl, much less one he'd only known for a month? Because she "listened to him"? The dude has spent a hundred years wandering the earth as a displaced and ** off spirit. A month of some random chick listening to him-not that he'd likely want to talk to a woman to begin with-would not suddenly change him into a caring person. He's so messed up and has been for so long that he probably isn't capable of love. Hell, he probably isn't capable of a coherent thought.

Not even going to touch on the Mary-Sue here. Twelve ghosts are enough. There's plenty to write about there. But I guess since it wouldn't involve the Jackal boinking your self-insertation, it's not interesting enough for you(or much of any of the readers on this site, it seems).

You've got potential and all. It's just so wasted on cliche stories like this that would be better off kept in your journal and off of the internet.

Great story and i can not wait to read more of it so please update as soon as you can please

More... Please give us more...!

please continue this is very good!