realy funny i dont know if this uis what you whare going for tho

Cool story. I can tell it has a lot of potential. There were some grammatical and spelling errors, but nothing that really hindered my enjoyment. I look forward to more of the other Shinji's wit.

Is it 'sardonic' or ironic'? You know, Shinji's delivery. Or the other Shinji's delivery. Anyway, please get yourself a nice Beta pre-reader. Even though I'm liking what you've done so far, I have to wade through too much (and mentally correct) typos, grammar faults, punctuation problems, etc. to really enjoy it. In hopes that you decide to pay a little more attention to the nuts and bolts, I'm adding this to my story alerts cause the pluses outweigh the minuses. Keep going, please.

Good trash carry on mon ami i see lots of potential here. it'd be be nice if you updated frequently too. Good **. Sorry im to lazy to log on and give a proper reveiw