Loved it.Especially the whole blowing up the squid bit. A little bit of levity to lighten the situation. Awesome story, well written.

Well, since McKay is my favorite character and he's been mostly unconscious throughout this story, I didn't connect with it as well as with most others you've written. ^^" Also, though I'm scared of spiders, I've never seen a scorpion or squid in real life to feel the true anxiety you tried to evoke. Both points are a pity, because generally I like your stories a great deal.

Due to which I followed this one also from start to finish, and yeah, girls saving the day is pretty cool. ^.~ I would have liked to accompany Teyla on her rampage against the Wraith rather than just being told about it after the fact, and I really enjoyed Jen blowing up that squid. (Did she get that idea from a movie?) I didn't quite get exactly how that act stopped the next wave of scorpions, though. Did the explosion's fire reach that high? Did they just run from the bright light?

Another thing I didn't grasp was how Teldy's team had been bothered by the squids wherever they were cut off *inside*. What was that commotion partly transmitted in the beginning? Why was the connection cut? If all they had to do was open a door (for more oxygen), why didn't they? How long did the whole ordeal for both parties take? As you can see, a lot of details remain unclear this time.

Nonetheless, I enjoyed reading, so once again, thank you for writing! ^^

As someone with mild entomophobia and fairly bad arachnophobia, this was a particularly horrific adventure for me to join the team on, but well done to them for surviving so well! I'm afraid I'd have cried and screamed like a girl! I particularly liked that Keller saved the day down below - we all know that Teyla is a very capable warrior and tactician, but Keller isn't, which makes her achievement all the greater. I still don't really ship her and Rodney, sweet though they are, but I don't mind reading about it.

This is a great start and I can't wait until I have enough time to read more. The descriptions are vivid as always and I especially liked your description of Woolsey. :)

Wonderful story I really enjoyed it. If only the writers had written Keller more like this!

Thanks for sharing.

A grand adventure! Hurrah, and thank you!

Wow! This environment is absolutely horrifying. Magnificent writing!

Wow. That was great. I can't stop reading. You catched all of them perfectly. Thanks a lot for the story. Just one question. What the scorpions were eating?

Woah! That was freaky, the monster suddenly being there, watching her, and her being alone to deal with it... nice idea with the oxygen cannister, blowing it up like that! I laughed at Ronon being so disappointed that he'd managed to miss it! XD
I also laughed at Rodney instantly knowing why the squid had come to attack them, and the discussion about Pegasus sending them cookies instead of monsters, for a change.
And nice timely rescue there :D I also agree that I like the girls saving the day - the guys get enough of it!
I liked all the team scenes back in Atlantis, and go Teyla! Great way of dealing with the Wraith! I also loved how she told John off like that, and then flicked straight back to being sweet and nice :P And I laughed at Woolsey's 'attempt to sound manly while bouncing a baby'! Especially liked Rodney 'bullying' Teyla into accepting an award, that was lovely, and he was quite right. And I really liked how you ended it with cookies!
Fantastic story, I really, really enjoyed reading it! :D

I again loved Teyla's determination here, but the description of her crossing the plain over ground she knew might not hold her was terrifying to me - really, really tense! I liked how she was studying the ground carefuly for plants and other things she could use as clues. Loved the bit about pretending she could fly to get herself to keep moving.
And the scorpions are coming... *shudders again* Ronon's approach made me laugh, blowing things up like that... I liked Keller whacking them with the pole :]
And I really thought that Teyla was going to fall when she missed that last jump! Love all the tension, again.
More on things about this story which are creepy - the water, and whatever's underneath it! (I type reviews as I read, which is why all this is rather disjointed.) I guess the scorpions have a pretty good reason to be so afraid of it... I liked the discussion about films, and then how their life hadn't turned out like Trek, or like they'd wished.
And the ant/sea monster attack was great. The monster reminds me of the Watcher in the water, from LOTR... Glad that Rodney woke up! And I loved his instant snark, particularly about suggesting they were inside Sheppard's locker.
I hope Teyla's ok too... and I'm intrigued as to what her plan is...

Loved the description of falling, that was very intense, and scary! I like how you used all his thoughts there, mixed in with the action. And he survived all that, just to get kicked in the head by Sheppard! Liked how you got the CPR realistic too, that's sometimes rare to find :P
And I really liked both Teyla's and Jennifer's determination that they were going to help, rather than leave the men down there. I think you got Teyla especially very in charater there, with her determination that she will not fall.
Being lowered through a nest of scorpions - ugh! Love that explaination, though, for the ground that isn't ground! And very brave of Jennifer to go through with that, even though she was so afraid.
I liked, too, John being so frustrated that control was slipping away from him as both Jennifer and Teyla managed to find loopholes in what he ordered them to do.

Just found time to start reading this, and it's brilliant so far! I really liked your characterisation of Woolsey here, and I'm especially intrigued by whatever's underground with all the people... (haven't seen Red Dwarf, so no guesses...)
And I definitely love the ground that isn't ground! I'm wondering what it's for, and, more importantly, how well the team will have survived falling through it... This is only a short review, because I'm impatient to see what happens next!

lol great wrap to the story :) and i kind of figured there must be something to the venom in the bugs :)

alright whats teyla up to cause it didnt sound like she was going straight to the gate ? and i wonder what the stings do.

Nice ending. I kinda agree with Rodney's POV of the ceremony. Often the meaning of the ceremony to other people is more important than the medal itself...there are exceptions of course. Teyla needs some recognition...did they ever do it on the show? Ta!