I like the second take so much better!!

really great story

And I like this one too...lol.

beautiful, great job!

So sweet, I love the details in the first letter about the children, and the underlaying love in all of them. You have captured moments so purely it is as if I am hearing Christopher Plummer speaking these words! Amazing job!

Poor Maria, Georg going off to serve and leaving her alone at such a time, I know he has no choice but still it is sad. Max is so brave to help them, in the story and movie as well as real life, he could have been killed for treason! I love everything about this story. Thank you for writing and posting it so the rest of us can escape reality for a bit and just fall into another world!

I love how you are keeping the story appropriate but still making it real, I mean Georg and Maria are in love and freshly engaged. Everyone seems very true to character which is wonderful. Great job!

That was awesome. I'm so glad you decided to go back and add to this chapter! I loved how you explored their feelings more and even added more dialogue to the scene where they discuss the plans to escape. I think it really helps get the idea of not only their fears of escaping but the real bond between Maria and Georg. As, of course, the wedding night section does as well. I think the breaks between scenes still convey that it's all happening rather quickly. So basically, this chapter is just amazing overall. Good work!

PS - sorry for not reviewing earlier, you know I would have if I had the chance.

Nice rewrite! I liked the changes and the added thoughts!

Beautifully done. The best chapter :-)

Like I said before, fabulous!

I enjoyed this a lot. You did a wonderful job.

That was beautiful. Well done!

Great update.

I think it's great that you intend to write the escape. I don't think this story actually needs to have it because you focused mainly on the romance so it makes sense to end it once that aspect is resolved.

Now, the writing was wonderful but I did have one huge problem. You rushed. I don't know if you were anxious to finish it or something, but everything happened very very quickly in this chapter. True, it is all one day. And it's okay to skip over the unimportant in between parts. You hit everything that was essential but there wasn't enough meat on it. The wedding night was better than the previous three sections but even that could use a little beefing up. Basically, what I would suggest, is describing every little detail of how they feel. You're good at explaining what happens, but you need to go more in depth with the feelings of Maria and Georg for the story to really finish as strong as you started it. I'm not sure exactly what you wanted but it seems that you built up all the tension to be released (pardon the sexual innuendo) on their wedding night. I think that's a great idea but to keep the tension and the high level of emotion going up until the end of the chapter I think it needs just a little more.

Please don't see this as a bad review because I really love the story, I just think that if you go back and edit/add to this last chapter it could be much better.

You've also shown that you'd be good at writing a love scene between Maria and Georg (a full love scene) sometime in the future. ;) I hope you consider it sometime.