I don't think this story is anything to be ashamed of. It's a great piece.

I think I love you. There were two or three parts where I wasn't sure what was going on, but the story is great over all.

You need to write more Near and B.

Defenitly B.

I loved that B! That was so good. I really love you style and work. Your Nate was cute too! ^^

I'm a little insulted at how you view your writing. After reading Pais Philos and Nekros Philos and having a spiraling array of horrid childhood memories brought back to me in a web of terrifyingly spun black widow's silk, I was sure that by now you would have a better opinion of your abilities. Suck it up and refrain from insulting your writing within your stories. It's a slap in the face to your fans and a slap in the face to yourself, something that you definitely don't deserve. You don't write stories at this caliber and then expect most of us to understand when you break down and say that it sucks. Have a little faith. Or at least pretend to.

Your self-hatred is competely unreasonable.
What I like about this is that it's not all 'rape-toture' that most B-fics mutate into, their relationship is twisted and odd, but I like that. You portary them brilliantly in your own setting.

Very, very interesting story. You are by far good enough; your writing is beautiful. B is quite interesting and I loved the way you portrayed Near. The idea is wonderful too. Very nicely written story.

awesome story.

I was a little annoyed that the aunts name was Erica. Because that's my name. And I don't like to share.

But other than that, AWESOME! I love B. Even if he is a jam eating creep.

Hi there! Wonderfully written story, it was effectively depressing and creepy lol. I am very taken with B as a blonde with blue eyes that's a novel idear! I actually read all the reviews as well and DITTO. I love your writing.
It's natural to have doubts and troubles and periods of self-loathing with writing or anything of that sort; it's great you're using writing as a catharsis! You have enormous writing potential, and unique style of writing, it's like atmospheric and hypnotic, and absorbing lol like a sponge. err... That's the wine talking. But seriously, kick those negative feelings in the ass. With some writing. Cos that way we all win LOL...

Whoa, at first, I was skeptical of the Near and Beyond ness, but, man, am I ever glad that I was stubborn and wanted to read everything that I could of yours. Whoa, is about the most I can say. It was adorable, sad, heartrenching, touching, angsty, mysterious and adventurous (just to name a few) all mixed into one giant wonderful heep. I still kinda wanna see exactly what Beyond's book held, since he was saying he was so great and all when all I took out of it was he mourning the 'loss' of his beloved L. "Beyond had gone through the trees and over the fields and, yes, over the sea." I reburst into tears at that point. (I had already cried my fill from another story. O.o) I even told it to mom, but, she didn't have a reaction. I memorized it. :D I love it so much! Abe and Angelina? O.o Just... wow. That made me laugh more then anything. :D Amazing job and I can't wait to support everything else that you have! XD! ♥

When I sit down to read a story from you, I've learned to separate myself from the stories I already know. This is a new world. These are the same characters, but the relationships and details are different.

No other author can pull it off this well.

With your stories, there is an acceptance that I usually can't find in AU stories. Truly, you deserve a genre of your own. The way you develop characters makes it seem less awkward than one might believe. It was perfectly reasonable to sit down and believe that, yes, Nate and L were brothers, or that L and Beyond were playmates.

I know I don't mention them much, but I am catching the small details that I somehow know you're setting out for deep readers to catch. Before it was ever said, I knew the plane held meaning. Leaving it behind made my heart hurt. Seeing half of Beyond, the one eye and slight face, before seeing the full version of Beyond after the completion and decision...seeing two very important decisions made at once...

I'm catching things like that in your stories. But usually, by the time I've reached the Review button, I forget to mention them.

I've just spent several hours catching up with your work, and these were probably the most worthwhile hours of my day. It might be four-thirty in the morning, but I fully believe that my time was spent wisely. I've missed reading your stories.

Never doubt your skill as a writer. You have the ability to manipulate minds with words, drive people to feel emotions in their rawest forms, and capture the attention of virtually anyone.

Write a novel. Please, write a novel. Your skill deserves more attention than this website can give you. Don't doubt your ability, don't fumble with characters. Just write. And don't stop until you're satisfied.

As always, I am in love with your words.

I love your writing. You can certainly write better then me. Cheer up =]. I really loved this story, it's a shame its ended.

Lovely.
It was so wonderful, I adored the relationship between Near and Beyond.
You are an amazing author.
I love everything you write :)

Your hatred for your writing makes no sense. Your writing is amazing and insanely beautiful and it feels like every word carries the plot. You do things with your writing I only wish I could do. I wish I could express it better, but I just returned from A-kon and am so tired that I don't have the strength to move my hand and grab the water next to me even though I'm dying of thirst.

Aside from that random tangent, let me just say that first, B is a favorite character of mine, but the way you've portrayed him adds something to his character that expresses how insanely maniacal he is without even needing to talk about him. I know plenty of writers who would just say he was creepy, but everything about the way you wrote him - his dialogue, the way he does things on purpose just to bug Near, etc. - makes him seem so odd, which is perfect for B.

Near was portrayed well, though I didn't get the same "omg, amazing" feeling that I got from B, but perhaps that was because his reactions to things make no sense to me. He's too emotionless for me to ever feel like he's a real character, and it's not the way you've done it, because it's accurate to his character, but he just bugs me. He needs to learn to act like he gives a damn about anyone, and maybe...

I did like the subtle hints to L that you gave, the random snapshots of his character that fleshed him out in an important role in a recurring way that didn't seem to overbearing... until B started talking, but B is a very overbearing person as a whole so I doubt that counts. It seems natural to me in this story, the way they chase after him like he's an idol, B because he's... I don't know. he seems to be in love with him in the creepiest obsessive way, and Near because he feels like he's not as good as, or perhaps not good enough for L.

I may be wrong, those were just the impressions I got.

The only thing that bugged me about this entire piece (other than Near) was the beginning references to the eyes. His aunt tells him "[Beyond] has eyes like you and your brother", but when B shows up, he has black contacts in to look like L because his eyes aren't the same. Maybe I just didn't understand, but it seemed weird to me that the first thing Near reflects on is how different his eyes (as well as L's) are from what he's heard of B.

B's quality of writing is apparently the opposite of yours, because I thought about that for a moment and went "what? wow... B sucks at life at writing". But it makes sense for his level of obsession. The fact that he creates such in-depth plots in his mind, but can't put it into a book pulls out the line from earlier more clearly when he confessed how he cheated, and pulls forth an oddly human side of B that I didn't really even see until we got there, and you see how desperate he was for approval that he would steal from movies so that L would think that he was creative. It's rather a trippy sense.

Now, since none of that probably made any sense (my brain isn't working. I apologize), I'm going to leave you with only that poorly organized review of your awesome skill and imaginary bribery in hopes that you will write another story soon.

-Kitsune Alchemist

I... don't understand. How can you possibly hate your writing?

First of all, this was a beautiful story. I love how subtly unhinged B is -- and the Abraham/Angelina Jolie thing was pure genius. You captured his personality perfectly, I think. There was a bittersweet quality to this writing, which, I suppose, might somehow be a distant reflection of your own feelings.

But there's no doubt about it. Your writing is top-notch. It's not so much a beauty of expression, or the use of big fancy words, or something as insignicant as the way words are arranged. It's your manner of undulating the story, letting it play out in both natural and unexpected ways -- then leaving it open in the end for the reader's imagination. It's the story itself that's so precious. And it's bizarre that you should think otherwise.

Thus, I wish you much encouragement. Please keep up the good work, Her Sweetness! :)

My dear you are a rare gem, a cynical romantic. *sighs* I imagine that you can’t see just how beautiful your twisting tales are, how they inspire? Or perhaps maybe you just wanted to hear the faceless masses reassure you? Because surely a woman as smart as you could not doubt her own? Then again loving your work too much could cause your downfall. In short my sweet, you are in all senses the perfect writer.
I truly do respect a person of such character and could only ever hope to copy your style. My mind bows, as does my loyalty follow.
In my opinion you are such a good writer simply because of your willingness to dive into the most disgusting and brilliant parts of the human mind’s composition, and your ability to portray it perfected.
*after I read the story*
T_T really? That’s the ending you give us? *head-desk moment* I’m left wanting more…What horrible word end is, it’s like the bottom of a soup bowl to the starving reader. It was and excellent read though. -3- want more…*pouts*