nice story! So sad when that happened to her in the tv show! I loved that episode to. Really awful what that rapist did!

Delightful little H/C

Really good! PLEASE write more!

This is excellent. Your execution is wonderful, and your characterizations are spot-on.

I don't usually enjoy present-tense stories as much as past, but choosing to set it the way you did fits perfectly with the tone of the scene. It makes you feel it first-hand and you get Foster's emotions and thoughts very vividly. As I read your first line, I tensed, and by the beginning of the second my stomach had already tensed up the way it does when someone's hurt.

"The next thing she knows, the pavement is flying up to meet her forehead." Now, I've never been attacked before, but taking a killer fall in rollerblades gives one that same sensation of hitting the ground in an unexpected and inevitably painful collision. That turn of phrase really connected an experience I as a reader have (tripping at high speeds) with a situation I wouldn't know how to respond to (getting punched in the face). It made it much more real to me to have that level of detail and involvement.

Another line that I liked was the one about her shoes. It felt really awkward the first time I read it, but when I went back and read the whole thing again, it seemed to fit. Something like that, you don't think logically. The oddest things stick out to you, and for Foster to notice her shoes are missing makes complete sense in an absurd kind of way. Because really, who would be able to think it through in a rational way, with so many HUGE emotions and thoughts running through one's head?

This is fast, intense scene, and your handling of it puts the reader into it and makes them experience Foster's fear.

I'd like to comment on the Lightman aspect, which I think you've handled phenomenally, but I'm falling asleep at the keyboard. Hopefully I'll make it back when I'm a little more awake and coherent in my head.

More More More! Love these two and your further interpetation of that scene was great. I would love to see where you think this will go and how Gillian and Cal will deal with this trauma. :0)

PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE CONTINUE ! I MISSED BLINDED :(
LUV IT !

This is making me want to watch this episode again.

Awesome!

Favourited.

This was gorgeous and well written!

Please write more Cal/Gillian stories ^_^

Agreed. That Blinded scene is great.
I really enjoyed reading this, nicely done. :)

I really liked this. You filled in a missing piece in the story really beautifully. I'd be happy to either see other Lie to Me stories from you, or more of this one :-)

Awesome job! You're a great writer :-)

Very nice look of what could have happened between the rescue and the hospital. I'd like to see you take this further, anything with Cal and Gillian post-Blinded.

Very interesting. I wish they had put this in the actual show! They're so meant for each other...

This was absolutely beautiful! I love them two so much and you have them down perfectly! I felt so bad for Gillian and it was so great to see Cal there to save her.
I hope to read more from you! You've got quite a talent! :D
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lilylynn

Very nicely done! i think you captured the characters spot on- great job!



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