Hey you updated this so quick how come you aren't now?

Not bad. Improve the writing a little and get rid of the "next time" parts and it'll be great!

MIKURU BEAM FTW! (by the way good job with the story)

Good work on this update! Keep on Keepin' On!

Good work! There is a Season II of Melancholy? Good start to what loos to be an excellent story!

One hundred billion belli on it being Luffy. NAMI, STAY AWAY FROM MY MONEY!
Artic: *Pounces* I've got you this time, Nami!
Ric: *age 25* *tackles Artic* Here you go, my lady. *Pays her twenty million belli*
Nami: *runs off*
Artic: Can't wait for teh update.

good start!

I'm liking how it goes and how powerful Mikuru really is!