WOW that was really good. i wish you made into a story. :)

Loved it damn why can't we all have hotties like edward?!?!
MBRxoxox

i want more i think that u could have a great story if you go on. and love it ;] ;] ;]
plz plz go on ;] ;] ;]

I love it aren't you going to write more?

i dont even know what to write. but you should totally make this into a real story not just a one-shot. cuz that was hot!

are you gonna finish this?

THAT story is absolutely brilliant and you should write some more of it

love it

hey there! love the story, the plot is amazing! i know it's much to ask but could you please make a full story out of this. the thought of edward being a ganster and bella a mafia princess is hot, intriguing. it would be a lot of fun to see how edward act as a mob king. bella selling drogs and shooting guns is thriling! please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please

DAMN!
i read it wrong!! for some reason i thought this was gonna be a long story!1
i am so stupid!
aw well it was still great!

just the first chapter and im already in love with it!

lmao... That Edward sounds somewhat frightening... I wonder how he would react if he had a daughter...

OMFG! Congratulations for the amazing story! Seriously I love it! Great job! I think you should continue this fanfic! Please keep writing!^^

Good story.

Really great story! I know I didn't know about the contest when it was going on, but if I had, I definitely would've voted for yours!