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excessivelyperky
2009-10-24 . chapter 7
I love the preparations they're making--'God, I love the smell of napalm in the morning'--and with Snape still a potions master, bet he could whip up a little C-4 if he needed to. Good chapter.
excessivelyperky
2009-09-07 . chapter 6
Good chapter. It will be easier for Snape without the whole school hating him, and with people to help him protect the children from the Carrows. And the confrontation with Harry should have happened in canon (and Harry has clearly forgotten how his dear sweet dad beat up on Snape four on one--but of course, anything's fair against a Slytherin, as he was carefully taught). Harry should realize that Snape was only defending himself, but of course he didn't till Albus finally (at last!) told the truth. Again, though, he was carefully taught all his time at Hogwarts that anything was ok as long as a Slytherin ended up hurt or nearly dead, so it's no surprise that he put it into action here.
excessivelyperky
2009-08-22 . chapter 5
Actually, Tom Riddle, raised in a Muggle orphanage, is still technically a subject of the Queen--and I suspect that such children have _some_ status. I also think in canon that Tom Riddle Sr. and Merope Gaunt were briefly married (and who knows if he waited till Merope's death to re-marry, which might make the status of _his_ Muggle children fairly exciting if anybody knew about the situation).

Ahem. Still good chapter, though, and I like how Severus and Lucius are routinely offering the Party Line in case someone is still listening.
excessivelyperky
2009-08-07 . chapter 4
Good Christmas chapter! Yes, Remus would be a good teacher--as long as he remembers his Wolfsbane (who's brewing it for him?). Pity he wasn't that responsible in canon, but he appears to be that way here.

You said there were two Horcruxes left, but then the kids talk like there was only one.

But then, nobody wants to think about Harry's scar much.
excessivelyperky
2009-08-03 . chapter 3
'Scot' is written with one t, "Scott's Tissue" with two. Just a thought. Anyway, interesting chapter, and hope Lucius and Snape can er, _confer_ together on how best to help Harry Potter.
excessivelyperky
2009-07-28 . chapter 2
I know what you mean about DH--Hermione packs the kitchen sink in her bag, but no food? And they can't be bothered to nick some stuff from a Quicki-Mart and leave a few Galleons to make it good? Or stop by the _empty_ Granger house to shower up every once in a while?

Good chapter, good use of house elves!
excessivelyperky
2009-07-28 . chapter 1
Good start--Lucius would rather be killed than humiliated, and even he can recognize Bella as out of her mind. Scoring one off of Voldemort and maybe getting her blamed for it (with the cup being in her vault) would just brighten his whole day.
loretta537
2009-07-28 . chapter 6
this is a good story, i cant wait to see what happens next
PandaChan915
2009-07-24 . chapter 6
Hey! Really good story! I love the way you write all the emotion into each charater. And darn it, I am mad that you left a cliffhanger for this chapter >=P Please uupdate soon!
P-Chan
WhiteElfElder
2009-07-23 . chapter 9
I bet Voldemort was amused by this...he never lets things happen just because they can. He is like Dumbledore in his ministrations and management of people's lives. That was well done with Neville, though things with Harry and Snape could have been a little more "fun".
WhiteElfElder
2009-07-22 . chapter 8
Hum...I trade of Snape for Neville...I am not sure who is getting the shaft there. Yes Neville is nice, but not very skilled for combat. Snape is mean, but skilled in both combat and potions. Personally, I would Imperius Snape and have him making potions day in and out. But, to be good, I guess Neville must be recovered.
yellow 14
2009-07-21 . chapter 7
Nearly all the muggleborns? It seems a little unlikely that they'd be able to keep them hidden. Keep updating
WhiteElfElder
2009-07-20 . chapter 7
Stupid, stupid Harry...should have known better than to approach Snape. For that he should be tortured until he finally gets his head straight.
WhiteElfElder
2009-06-26 . chapter 6
So, Hermione's parents have been undercover British Intelligence during all of this...how utterly funny. Here, she thought her parents only knew about magic because of her. Can't wait for the action, as with all of this build-up it should be quite explosive.
yellow 14
2009-06-23 . chapter 6
I'm thinking that studying Tolkien is barking up the wrong tree as it were. Tolkien's magic works very differently to HP magic. He might be better off studying comic book heroes such as Batman and the Punisher. They live in a world where powers are commonplace and have to adapt far more so than the people of Tolkien's world, where more convential warfare tends to happen. Keep updating
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