|Reviews for Living|
| bittersweet bliss 5/10/10 . chapter 1
I love your writing, from humor to drama. You write the best angst I've ever written as well- not too over the top but just enough to give the reader that feeling.
| Shadowlord-Ookami 9/1/09 . chapter 1
I loved it,
| cance 8/16/09 . chapter 1
I really enjoyed reading this. I like its simplicity and the way it evokes emotion with such few words.
| Amrun 7/15/09 . chapter 1
I like this characterisation of Kakashi. I think it's accurate, though bleak.
I understand that you are breaking certain grammar rules for effect. That's fine, but it's something you have to be very careful with. With something so short and blunt, your meaning should be absolutely clear the first time around. You use so many fragments that sometimes the "verb" gets muddled, among other things.
One sentence in particular that didn't make much sense is this: The prodigy he saw himself in and tried to aid before he surrendered to the lure of power, but fell anyway.
If you're going to do something short, you have to concentrate on the details.
I liked the style of this, actually; I'm just trying to give you a little bit of feedback here. Thanks for sharing.
| Obelisk of Light 6/9/09 . chapter 1
It's a dark and striking look into Kakashi's mind. Good job.