SADNESS! BUT YOU ARE A GOOD WRITER :)

pretty nice

Really -sniff- really awesome! I always thought of him to die like that...

wait wasnt luxa in the dungeon or something when all this was happening? it was a good writing and by the way you should make your first fic go for a while. its my fav of yours so far. one more thing all your rated m fics were kinda disturbing so stop with those plz

Hmm...I always thought that Gregor should have been the one to die, but don't they specifically mention at some point that they don't bury their dead, they send them down the Waterway? I'm pretty sure. Anyway, it's a pretty good story, although some of the grammar isn't flawless, and the Underlanders are kind of speaking in a little too modern a way for it to be perfect, it's pretty good.

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"YOU SUNK MY BATTLESHIP!"

wow i didnt expect gregors death to be intresting i was trying to put off reading this because of the summery keep writing

OMG! That was HORRIBLE!! Gregor DIES?! NO!

u do know that if that realy did happen that ares would probebly 100 percent chance kill himself so im just clearing that up

no offence, but i like the other ending better. i no tht life isnt all cupcakes and gum drops but i think it was better happy.

HOW COULD YOU! YOU LET GREGOR DIE! THATS NOT RIGHT! sorry, i lost my temper there. i wanted you to let gregor AND ares die. and how could you let luxa be in that kind of pain? she lost her parents, some of her friends, and now her one and true love?!?!?!?! that a lot for one person to take. otherwise, good ending.

Good Job I like how you made it your own, different than my version.

aw... Gregor had to die... so sad. Is this a one shot, or are u continuing. I hope further noticd comes soon about Gregor after the Code of Claw :) All in all though, it's good writing, even if it's sad, a few mistakes but overall great.