awesome job

This was awesome :) It was pretty good for your first one

i loved it!!

This was so great.. So Damn HOT...

Just to let you know, you put,
"wanting him to remove her jeans" when earlier you put "Her skirt was hitched up slightly at the back".

Overall it wasn't too bad but I think you could do with reading before you post because there was quite a few grammatical and spelling errors throughout which can get annoying. I'm not trying to be mean but mearliy give you tips for improving. :)

That was hot. Good job.

Check your sentence structured. First you wrote, Gabriella was wearing a skirt then towards the end, she was wearing jeans? Hm..

it was pretty good, maybe there could be something next like another chap or something where she can surprise him ,she didn't expected him to go after her and he did so maybe something she can do for him, after all she was the one who didn't trust him. Maybe she cand do something for him
cya soon
kro

that was really good I liked it